自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be clear, concise, and correct mistakes. Start with a direct topic sentence, correct wrong words (bag → bike), avoid repetition, and give one brief reason. Use linking words to connect ideas (for example, "but now" or "so"). Keep it to 2–3 sentences and smooth hesitations.

範例: Yes. I had a bike when I was about six years old, but I don't have one now because I rarely ride. Instead, I usually travel by motorbike or car.

建議: Give a clear topic sentence, then support it with specific, logical reasons using linking words (for example, "because" and "therefore"). Avoid double negatives and incorrect grammar. Be specific about causes (e.g., traffic, convenience, safety) and effects (e.g., fewer cyclists). Limit to 2–4 sentences.

範例: No, I don't think bikes are very popular in my country anymore because many people prefer cars and motorcycles for convenience and speed. Because of heavy traffic and concerns about safety and pollution, fewer people choose to cycle.

× Yes, I used to have a bag when I was uh, maybe six years old, but now I currently don't have a bike anymore because I don't use it use it anymore and I usually umm, Dr. motorcycle or or.

✓ Yes, I used to have a bike when I was, maybe, six years old, but now I don't have a bike because I don't use it anymore; I usually ride a motorcycle.

Errors: repeated words ('use it use it'), incorrect word 'bag' instead of 'bike' (likely slip), and 'Dr.' is not a verb. The phrase 'currently' is redundant with 'now'. The verb form 'ride' (base form) is needed after 'usually' to describe habitual action. Suggestion: remove redundancies, correct lexical choice to 'bike', use 'ride' for vehicles, and avoid filler words. Relevant grammar type: Verb in the present participle form (10) because the student attempted an incorrect verb form/word usage and repetition causing ungrammatical verb phrase.

× In my opinion, I think uh, in my country the bike is not popular anymore because of many cars and motorcycle nowadays they are always drive and then because of the air pollution it's make our body bad.

✓ In my opinion, bikes are not popular in my country anymore because there are many cars and motorcycles nowadays; they are always being driven, and because of air pollution, it harms our health.

Errors: incorrect singular/plural ('the bike' should be plural 'bikes'), wrong verb forms ('motorcycle' plural and 'drive' should be passive or continuous), 'it's make our body bad' is ungrammatical and vague. Use 'there are' to state existence of many vehicles. Use plural 'motorcycles'. Use 'are being driven' or 'drive' for habitual action. Replace 'make our body bad' with 'harms our health'. Suggestion: use correct plural forms, proper existential 'there are', correct verb forms for passive/habitual actions, and precise health expressions. Relevant grammar type: Present tense issue (6) because the student used incorrect present-tense constructions and forms.

× So no one in my country or less in my country don't use bike anymore.

✓ So almost no one in my country uses bikes anymore.

Errors: double negative ('no one... don't'), awkward phrase 'or less in my country', and pronoun/verb agreement issue ('use' should be 'uses' with 'no one'). Use 'almost no one' or 'few people' for intended meaning. Ensure subject-verb agreement: 'no one' takes singular verb. Suggestion: avoid double negatives and unclear modifiers; use concise expressions like 'almost no one' and correct verb agreement.