自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be clear, grammatical and concise. Start with a direct topic sentence in the past tense, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct verb tenses and avoid filler words. For example, say when you got the bike, who gave it to you, and a short detail about how you used it.

範例: Yes, I did. My father bought me a bright red bicycle for my fifth birthday, and I rode it everyday in the park near our house. Because I practiced a lot, I learned to ride without training wheels within two weeks.

建議: Answer directly and use clearer linking words and plural agreement. Provide one specific reason and an example or comparison. Reduce hesitations and correct grammar (plural forms and word order).

範例: Yes, I think bicycles are very popular in my country because many sports shops sell a wide range of models and cycling is promoted at schools. For example, I often see children and adults riding to school or to the market, especially on weekends.

× Yes I have, like when I was a child my dad billed me uh in my birthday for when I was 5.

✓ Yes, I did. When I was a child, my dad bought me a bike for my 5th birthday.

The student used present tense 'have' to answer a past question; the correct short answer for a past possession is 'Yes, I did' (Present tense issue ID 6 relates to incorrect present tense usage here). Additionally, several verbs are incorrect: 'billed me' is wrong in context; the appropriate verb is 'bought me'. Word order and articles were also fixed: 'in my birthday' should be 'for my birthday' and specifying 'a bike' clarifies the object. Suggestion: use past tense forms for events in the past and check verb choice (bought, gave) and preposition for occasions ('for my birthday').

× Well yes, I think it is 'cause there are a lot of, umm, sports shops that sell bikes and I see it almost in every child in outdoors.

✓ Well, yes, I think they are, because there are a lot of sports shops that sell bikes and I see them on almost every child outdoors.

The original uses singular 'it' to refer to plural 'bikes' and uses incorrect pronoun and preposition choices. 'It' should be 'they' to agree with plural 'bikes' (Incorrect use of pronouns ID 12). Also 'I see it almost in every child' is ungrammatical; 'I see them on almost every child' or better 'I see them with almost every child outdoors.' 'In outdoors' is incorrect; use 'outdoors' or 'outside'. Suggestion: match pronouns to their antecedents (singular/plural) and use correct prepositions with 'see' and location expressions.