自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details. Avoid filler words and tense inconsistencies. Use linking words like “so” or “and” to connect ideas and keep sentences within 3–4 simple sentences.

範例: Yes. I had a bike as a child and I often rode it to the park with my friends and family. Riding made me feel excited because I could race my friends and explore nearby paths, so it was one of my favorite activities.

建議: Give a direct opinion first, then support it with specific reasons and use clearer linking words. Avoid hesitations and correct grammar (e.g., “more popular than in the past”). Provide one or two concrete examples (commuting, short trips) to make your answer credible.

範例: Yes, I think bikes are more popular in Japan now than in the past. In many cities people choose bikes for short commutes because they are cheap and eco-friendly, and bike lanes and rental services have become more common, making cycling more convenient.

× Yes, when I was a child, I used to have a bike. When I go to uh, the park with my friends or my family, I used to use a bike, which makes me feel excited and happy.

✓ Yes, when I was a child, I used to have a bike. When I went to the park with my friends or my family, I used to use a bike, which made me feel excited and happy.

This sentence contains inconsistent past tense usage. The speaker is describing habitual actions in the past, so past tense forms should be used throughout. 'When I go to the park' uses present tense and should be 'When I went to the park.' 'Which makes me feel' is present and should be 'which made me feel.' Suggestion: keep verbs in the past when describing past habitual actions (used to + base verb and past simple verbs for related clauses).

× I will say in Japan, riding a bike is more popular than past because, uh, uh, especially in uh, the city. City because it's more environmental things, which is useful.

✓ I would say that in Japan, riding a bike is more popular than in the past, especially in cities, because it is better for the environment and useful.

Several errors here: 'I will say' is awkward for opinion—'I would say' is more natural. Comparison 'more popular than past' is missing 'in the': 'more popular than in the past.' 'the city. City' is repetitive and singular; use plural 'cities' for a general statement. 'It's more environmental things' is ungrammatical; use 'better for the environment' or 'more environmentally friendly.' Also 'which is useful' is vague; integrate as 'and useful.' Suggestion: use correct prepositions ('in the past'), plural nouns for general statements ('cities'), and clearer phrasing for environmental benefits.