自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Improve grammar (past tense and subject-verb agreement), reduce hesitations, and make the response more concise and coherent. Begin with a clear topic sentence, use one or two specific supporting details, and employ linking words (for example, “however” or “so”) to organize ideas. Avoid repetition and filler words (uh, maybe).

範例: I didn't have a bike when I was a child because my parents wouldn't allow it. However, my younger brother owned one, so I sometimes borrowed it to ride around the neighborhood. I remember feeling disappointed because I wanted to learn to ride like other children.

建議: Clarify and organize the answer with a clear topic sentence followed by specific reasons and a linking word. Correct grammar (plural forms and verb agreement) and use precise vocabulary (e.g.,“convenient,” “more common among men”). Avoid vague phrases like “parents things” — explain briefly (social or cultural norms). Keep to two or three sentences max.

範例: Yes, bikes are quite common in my country because they are cheap and convenient for short trips. However, riding is more common among men due to conservative social norms and family concerns about safety and reputation, so fewer women use bikes in public.

× No, I don't have any bike or bicycle when I was child.

✓ No, I didn't have any bike or bicycle when I was a child.

The sentence mixes present simple ('don't have') with a past time reference ('when I was child'). Use past simple 'didn't have' for past events and include the article 'a' before 'child'. Also 'any bike or bicycle' is awkward; 'any bike' or 'a bicycle' would be preferable. Suggestion: Use consistent past tense: 'I didn't have a bike when I was a child.'

× It's uh, saddest things in my life 'cause my parents doesn't allow this.

✓ It's one of the saddest things in my life because my parents didn't allow it.

There is a plural noun 'parents' requiring the plural verb form; 'doesn't' is singular. The sentence refers to a past action, so use past simple 'didn't allow'. Also use 'one of the saddest things' for correct noun phrase and 'it' instead of 'this'. Suggestion: 'It's one of the saddest things in my life because my parents didn't allow it.'

× But one thing is my younger brother has a bike.

✓ But my younger brother had a bike.

The original is awkwardly structured. For past narrative keep past simple: 'my younger brother had a bike.' Avoid unnecessary 'one thing is'. Suggestion: 'But my younger brother had a bike.'

× That's why maybe I sometimes I just use that and it's my it.

✓ So sometimes I would borrow it and use it.

The sentence is redundant and uses inconsistent tense and pronouns ('it's my it'). Use a clear past-habit expression: 'would borrow it' or 'used to borrow it'. Pronoun 'it' refers to the bike, no extra 'my' needed. Suggestion: 'So sometimes I would borrow it and use it.'

× Yeah, most of the time bike is popular cause 'cause it's just easy to convenient and easy to go to a place where we need to go.

✓ Yeah, bikes are generally popular because they're convenient and make it easy to get where we need to go.

Use plural 'bikes' when speaking generally. 'Is popular' should be 'are popular' for plural. 'Easy to convenient' is incorrect; use 'convenient'. Also simplify 'easy to go to a place where we need to go' to 'make it easy to get where we need to go.' Suggestion: 'Bikes are generally popular because they're convenient and make it easy to get where we need to go.'

× But in my country it just man used bikes, but women doesn't 'cause it's uh, just, uh, like a Muslim country and parents things and society things.

✓ But in my country mainly men use bikes; women usually don't because it's a Muslim country and parents and society discourage it.

Pronoun and subject-verb agreement: 'man used bikes' is incorrect — use 'men use bikes'. 'Women doesn't' should be 'women don't'. Clarify 'parents things and society things' to 'parents and society discourage it'. Use present simple for general statements: 'men use', 'women don't'. Suggestion: 'But in my country mainly men use bikes; women usually don't because it's a Muslim country and parents and society discourage it.'