自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Improve grammar, tense accuracy, and expand slightly with one supporting detail. Start with a clear past-tense topic sentence ("Yes, I did") and add one brief specific detail about the bike (e.g., color, who gave it, or how often you used it). Keep total length under five sentences and avoid filler words.

範例: Yes, I did. I had a red bicycle that my parents bought me when I was eight, and I rode it to school and to friends' houses almost every day.

建議: Make the answer more natural and clearer by correcting grammar, using linking words, and providing a specific reason and example. Use present-tense statements with a topic sentence, then add one or two supporting details using linking words like 'because' or 'for example'. Avoid hesitation and vague phrases like 'travelling modules.'

範例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because petrol prices are high, so many people choose motorcycles and scooters to save money. For example, commuters often use bikes for short trips and to avoid traffic during rush hour.

× Yes, I do have.

✓ Yes, I did.

The question asks about the past (Did you have ... when you were a child?), so the student should use past tense. 'Do have' is present tense and incorrect here. Use 'did' as the past auxiliary with the base verb: 'Yes, I did' or 'Yes, I had.' Suggestion: respond with 'Yes, I did' or 'Yes, I had a bike.'

× Yes they are because of the petrol spikes in our country.

✓ Yes, they are, because of petrol price spikes in our country.

The original uses 'the petrol spikes' which is awkward and missing an article/word order: 'petrol price spikes' is the correct collocation. Also add a comma after 'Yes, they are' for clarity. Suggestion: use 'petrol price spikes' or 'increases in petrol prices.'

× People do like bikes to travel from one place when there is a very low average as compared to other uh, travelling, uh modules.

✓ People like to use bikes to travel because the average cost is much lower compared with other modes of transport.

Multiple issues: 'do like' is unnecessary emphasis—'like' suffices. 'To travel from one place' is unidiomatic; use 'to travel' or 'to get around.' 'Very low average' is vague; the intended meaning is 'average cost is much lower.' 'As compared to' is wordy; 'compared with' or 'compared to' is better. 'Travelling modules' is incorrect—use 'modes of transport.' Suggestion: simplify to 'People like to use bikes to travel because the average cost is much lower compared with other modes of transport.'