自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Improve clarity, grammar and coherence. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details linked with simple connectors (for example, “because” or “and”). Avoid redundant phrases and incorrect verb forms. Also use precise vocabulary (e.g., “childhood,” “bicycle,” “after school,” “fresh air”). Limit to 3–4 sentences.

範例: Yes. I had a bicycle when I was a child because my mother bought me a small Cub brand bike. I used to ride it every day after school and I remember feeling free as I enjoyed the fresh air in my neighborhood. Those rides are one of my happiest childhood memories.

建議: Make your opinion clear and give specific reasons with coherent linking words. Start with a direct answer (Yes/No/It depends). Then add 1–2 clear reasons and an example or comparison. Use correct vocabulary (e.g., “bicycles,” “motorbikes,” “urbanization,” “traffic,” “two decades ago”). Keep sentences short and grammatical.

範例: It depends. About twenty years ago bicycles were quite common, especially in smaller towns, but today they are less popular. Rapid urbanization and the rise of motorbikes and cars have made motorbikes the dominant mode of transport in many cities, so I rarely see bicycles on the streets now.

× Yes, of course, whenever the trials I would lucky because my mother bought me a cube bike, you know, and I got a chance drove ride bikes every time when I finished my school and I remember that would be one of the most wonderful times in my own lives because I rode by and enjoyed the fresh years when I was a baby as it's in my childhood.

✓ Yes, of course. I was lucky because my mother bought me a small bicycle, and I had a chance to ride it every day after I finished school. I remember those were some of the most wonderful times of my life because I rode my bike and enjoyed the fresh air during my childhood.

This sentence has multiple sentence structure problems (run-on, unclear clauses) and subject-verb issues. Split into clearer sentences, use past simple tense to match the question about childhood, correct word choices (cube bike -> small bicycle; drove ride -> to ride; finished my school -> finished school), and correct possessive and plural forms (one of the most wonderful times of my life). Suggestions: break long sentences into shorter ones, keep consistent past tense, and choose precise vocabulary.

× It depends on the hours I think like around 2 decades ago by you to be develop. Sorry you to be popular in my country but right now I rarely see the buy on the streets due to their rapid change or rabbit crawl of society.

✓ It depends. About two decades ago bicycles were more popular in some places of the country, but now I rarely see them on the streets because of rapid social and economic changes.

This sentence has incorrect tense use and awkward phrasing. Use past simple 'were' to refer to two decades ago and present simple 'I rarely see' for current observation. Replace unclear phrases ('by you to be develop', 'buy', 'rabbit crawl of society') with precise expressions ('in some places', 'bicycles', 'rapid social and economic changes'). Suggestions: state past and present situations clearly with appropriate past or present tense and avoid literal translations or idiomatic errors.

× So motorbike would be the real dominant vehicle in society right now.

✓ So motorbikes are the dominant vehicle in society right now.

Original uses conditional 'would be' and singular 'motorbike' awkwardly. Use present simple 'are' to state a current fact and plural 'motorbikes' to refer to the vehicle type in general. Suggestions: use present simple for general truths and match subject number with verb.