自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Pronunciation, word choice and grammar errors reduce clarity. Correct obvious mistakes (buy → bicycle/bike, possesses → possession/precious), use a clear topic sentence and 1–2 supporting details, avoid redundancy. Also reduce length to no more than five sentences and use linking words if adding details (for example, 'because' or 'so').

範例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My father gave it to me as a birthday gift, and I used it every day to visit friends and explore my neighborhood. Because it was my first real freedom, it felt very special to me.

建議: The student repeated the previous personal story instead of answering the general question about popularity. Focus on answering the examiner's question directly with a clear opinion about popularity, then add one or two specific supporting reasons and linking words. Correct grammar (e.g., 'gave it to me', 'special possession') and avoid repeating irrelevant details.

範例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because many people use them for short commutes and exercise. For example, in cities you can see many students and office workers cycling to save money and avoid traffic.

× Yes, I had a buy when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.

The student wrote 'buy' instead of 'bike', which is a lexical error (wrong word) rather than pluralization; however it causes a singular noun to be incorrect. Replace with the correct singular noun 'bike'. Suggestion: check spelling and phonetic similarity when writing familiar vocabulary.

× It's really special possesses because I used it every day to visit my friends and explore my neighborhood.

✓ It was really special because I used it every day to visit my friends and explore my neighborhood.

The phrase 'special possesses' is ungrammatical. The intended meaning is that the bike was special, so use the adjective 'special' with the copula. Also, the past tense 'was' matches 'used' and the time frame 'when I was a child'. Suggestion: use 'was special' for past description and avoid adding extra words like 'possesses'.

× My father gave me it to me as a birthday gift.

✓ My father gave it to me as a birthday gift.

The original sentence redundantly includes both 'me it' and 'to me', causing ungrammatical double objects. Use the correct word order 'gave it to me' or 'gave me it' (the former is more natural here). Suggestion: when using 'give', use 'gave + object + to + recipient' or 'gave + recipient + object' but not both.

× It was really a special position because I used it every day and I could visit my friends and explore the neighborhoods and it.

✓ It was really special because I used it every day and could visit my friends and explore the neighborhood.

The phrase 'special position' is incorrect in this context; 'position' is not the intended noun. Also 'the neighborhoods and it' is redundant and ungrammatical. Use 'special' to describe the bike, singular 'neighborhood' fits the general area, and remove unnecessary 'and it'. Suggestion: keep descriptions concise and choose nouns that fit the context.