自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence answering the question, then add one or two supporting details. Avoid contradictory phrasing and redundant words (e.g., “on it”). Use correct tense and simple vocabulary. For example, say you didn’t have a bike but did have a bicycle, explain why or how often you used it, and use linking words like “but” or “however” correctly.

範例: No, I didn’t have a motorbike as a child, but I did have a bicycle that I rode to school and around my neighborhood almost every day. It helped me stay active and made it easy to visit friends nearby.

建議: Give a clear topic sentence and support it with specific reasons and one or two examples. Replace informal contractions like “'cause” with “because” and improve grammar (use plural/singular correctly). Use linking words such as “because” and “for example” to make your answer coherent.

範例: Yes, I think bikes are very popular in Pakistan because many middle-class families use them as an affordable and convenient way to travel. For example, people commonly use motorcycles to commute to work, go to the market, and run household errands.

× No, I'm a girl. I don't have a bike, but all instead of this I have a bicycle that I used to ride on it.

✓ No, I'm a girl. I don't have a bike, but instead I have a bicycle that I used to ride.

Problems: redundant pronoun/object ('on it') and awkward phrase 'all instead of this'. The sentence uses an unnecessary pronoun 'it' after 'ride' because 'ride' already takes the object 'a bicycle'. Also 'all instead of this' is incorrect word order and choice. Suggestion: remove 'all' and 'on it', and place 'instead' before 'I have' to form 'instead I have a bicycle that I used to ride'. This yields clear, grammatical English and keeps past habit 'used to ride'. Grammar problem type ID:12

× Yes, I do 'cause in Pakistan most of the people are middle class and they have bikes and they perform their household chores and duties on that bike.

✓ Yes, I do, because in Pakistan most people are middle class; they have bikes and use them to perform household chores and duties.

Problems: 'most of the people' is awkward—'most people' is preferred. Using 'on that bike' is incorrect when referring generally; use plural 'them' to match 'bikes'. Contraction 'cause' is informal; use 'because' in formal speech. Also repetitive 'and they' can be streamlined. Suggestion: say 'most people' and 'use them to perform household chores' to maintain number agreement and clarity. Grammar problem type ID:14