自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be direct and clear: give a concise topic sentence saying whether you had a bike, then add one or two specific supporting details (e.g., who gave it, how you used it, a brief memory). Avoid repetition and hesitations. Use correct simple past structures (e.g., “my parents bought/gave me a bike”) and limit your answer to up to 4–5 short sentences. Use linking words like “and” or “so” to connect ideas.

範例: Yes, I did. My parents bought me a small red bike when I was six, and I learned to ride it in the park near our house. I used to ride it to visit friends and felt very proud when I could cycle without training wheels.

建議: Answer directly with a clear opinion, then support it with two specific reasons or examples. Reduce fillers like “umm” and avoid unclear phrases. Use linking words (e.g., “because,” “for example,” “so”) to organize your response. Provide concrete details such as who uses bikes, typical places they are used, or comparisons (e.g., urban vs rural). Keep it to 3–4 concise sentences.

範例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because many people use them for short commutes and exercise. For example, children ride bikes to school and adults often cycle to work in the city to avoid traffic. So cycling is common among all ages and in many towns.

× Yeah, definitely. Actually when I was young, I when I was child, my parents sent me back.

✓ Yeah, definitely. Actually, when I was young and when I was a child, my parents sent me back.

The original sentence has missing words and a repeated fragment causing poor sentence structure and missing articles. 'I when I was child' lacks the pronoun 'was' and the article 'a'. Also the repetition 'when I was young, I when I was a child' is redundant. Combine the time expressions and include the article: 'when I was a child' or 'when I was young and a child'. This fixes the sentence structure and clarity.

× Yeah, for sure, because, umm, there are so many people and the children's and practice, uh, write backs, umm, from children to adults, right?

✓ Yeah, for sure, because there are so many people and children practice riding bikes, from kids to adults, so it's very popular.

The original sentence misuses noun forms and adjectives and contains confusing fragments ('the children's and practice', 'write backs'). Replace incorrect phrases with correct nouns and verbs: 'children practice riding bikes' uses the verb 'practice' with a verb phrase 'riding bikes'. Use 'kids' or 'children' consistently. Also remove filler words and restructure the sentence for clarity while keeping present-tense general statement appropriate for popularity.