自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be clearer and more grammatical. Start with a direct topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid filler sounds (uh, hmm) and correct verb forms and word order (e.g., "my father gave it to me"). Aim for 2–4 sentences and include a short reason or a memory to make the answer more engaging.

範例: Yes, I did. My father gave me a small tricycle for my fifth birthday, and I loved riding it around the neighborhood. Because it had three wheels, I felt confident and could ride without help, so I spent many afternoons practicing on the sidewalk.

建議: Give a clear opinion first (Yes or No), then explain with specific reasons and examples, using linking words (for example, however, although). Avoid vague phrases and filler words. Use correct grammar: say "cars are more popular" or "bikes are not very common" and provide a short comparison to other countries.

範例: I don't think bikes are very popular in my country because most people prefer cars for convenience and status. For example, many families own private cars and the roads are built mainly for motor vehicles; however, in some European cities cycling is common because of good infrastructure and compact streets.

× I had a bike that gave my father to me on my birthday present.

✓ I had a bike that my father gave to me as a birthday present.

The original sentence uses incorrect word order and prepositions. 'gave my father to me' is wrong; the correct order is 'my father gave (something) to me'. Also 'on my birthday present' is incorrect; use 'as a birthday present' to indicate the item was a present. Suggestion: keep the subject (my father) before the verb (gave) and use 'as a birthday present' for clarity.

× I was love my bike.

✓ I loved my bike.

The phrase 'I was love' mixes a past continuous auxiliary with a base verb incorrectly. To express past simple emotion use the past simple 'loved'. Alternatively, 'I used to love my bike' is possible to emphasize habitual past feeling. Suggestion: use 'loved' for a simple past statement.

× That had three, uh, three tyres like tricycle.

✓ It had three wheels, like a tricycle.

Use 'it' to refer to the bike, not 'that' at sentence start in this context. 'Tyres' is a correct noun but 'wheels' is more natural in this description; also remove duplicated 'three'. The clause 'like tricycle' needs an article: 'like a tricycle'. Suggestion: say 'It had three wheels, like a tricycle.' for clarity.

× No, I think so by car not popular in our country because of uh thinking and uh society and uh uh, in other hands, uh other countries like Europe and uh Dubai, et cetera.

✓ No, I don't think bicycles are popular in my country because of people's attitudes and our society; on the other hand, in some other places like Europe and Dubai they are more popular.

Multiple problems: verb agreement and sentence structure. 'I think so by car not popular' is ungrammatical. Use 'I don't think bicycles are popular' to state the opinion. 'People's attitudes' is clearer than 'thinking'. 'In other hands' should be 'on the other hand'. Also 'These countries has' (next sentence) shows subject-verb disagreement; use 'they are' or 'they have'. Suggestions: break into two sentences or use a clear contrast connector 'on the other hand', ensure subject-verb agreement with plural subjects ('they are more popular').

× These countries has.

✓ These countries do.

'Countries' is plural, so the verb must be plural: not 'has' but 'have' or a short form like 'do' (if completing previous clause 'are more popular') . In context a full correction is better: 'They are.' or 'They do.' Suggestion: match plural subject with plural verb: 'These countries have' or 'They are' depending on intended meaning.