自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Improve clarity and grammar, give a direct topic sentence, then one or two concise supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and incorrect verbs (e.g., "learn it how to ride", "couldn't write riding"). Be specific about age or reasons and use cohesive devices like "because" or "so".

範例: No, I didn't have a bike as a child because I was afraid of falling and getting injured. As a result, my parents never let me learn to ride, so I used to walk or take the bus to school.

建議: Start with a clear topic sentence, then give two specific reasons with linking words and a brief example. Correct grammar ("ride them", "they are handy in traffic") and avoid vague phrases like "enjoy time."

範例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are much cheaper to buy and run than cars. Additionally, they are handy in heavy traffic, so many commuters prefer bikes; for example, delivery riders and office workers often use motorcycles to save time.

× As a child, I did not own a bike as I did not learn it how to ride.

✓ As a child, I did not own a bike because I never learned how to ride one.

The sentence misuses the pronoun 'it' and has incorrect word order 'learn it how to ride'. Replace 'it' with 'one' (referring to a bike) and use the correct verb pattern 'learn how to ride'. Also use 'because' for reason and 'never learned' is more natural for not acquiring the skill.

× That is also due to my fear of riding, falling down and meeting with an accident.

✓ That was also due to my fear of riding, of falling down, and of having an accident.

The original mixes tenses and omits repeated prepositions, making the list awkward. Use past tense 'was' to match prior clause, and include 'of' before each gerund phrase for parallel structure. Use 'having an accident' rather than 'meeting with an accident' which is unnatural in English.

× That's the reason I couldn't write riding on a bike.

✓ That's the reason I couldn't ride a bike.

The phrase 'couldn't write riding on a bike' is incorrect word choice and structure. Use 'couldn't ride a bike' to express inability. Remove 'write' which is unrelated.

× Bikes are very much popular in my country.

✓ Bikes are very popular in my country.

'Very much popular' is nonstandard; use the adjective phrase 'very popular'. The structure 'very popular' correctly modifies 'bikes'.

× People usually buy bikes and ride it as it is cost friendly compared to cars.

✓ People usually buy bikes and ride them because they are more cost‑friendly than cars.

The pronoun must agree in number with 'bikes' so use 'them' not 'it'. Also use 'because' for reason, 'they are' to refer to bikes, and 'more cost‑friendly than cars' for comparison.

× Cars are usually expensive and it is handy because of the traffic.

✓ Cars are usually expensive, and bikes are handy because of traffic.

The pronoun 'it' is unclear and singular; replace with 'bikes' to contrast with cars. Remove 'the' before 'traffic' when speaking generally. Keep tense and meaning consistent.

× So usually people love to ride bikes and enjoy time.

✓ So usually people love to ride bikes and enjoy their time.

The phrase 'enjoy time' is incomplete; specify 'their time'. Maintain parallel structure 'love to ride bikes and enjoy their time' for clarity.