自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Reduce hesitation and filler words, make the response more concise and structured: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Also correct minor grammar (e.g., 'take some foods' → 'buy some food'). Aim for 3–4 sentences and include a brief reason or example to make it more informative.

範例: Yes. I had a bike as a child and I used it almost every day. For example, I rode it with friends around my neighbourhood and often cycled to the shop to buy food for my family. Because of that, the bike was very useful for short trips.

建議: Clarify and complete your ideas, avoid repetition and incorrect word order. Provide one clear comparison with a reason and a brief example. Use linking words (however, for example) and correct phrasing (e.g., 'not as popular as in some European countries'; avoid trailing unfinished clauses).

範例: Yes, bikes are fairly popular in my country, but not as common as in some European countries. For example, in cities like Amsterdam many people use bikes for daily travel; however, in my country people prefer cars and public transport, so you see fewer cyclists, especially older people.

× Yes uh, in my childhood I used to have a bike which I used almost every day to like, uh, ride with my friends, uh, to travel around my town and maybe just to get to the shop to take some uh, foods for my family and come back with that bike.

✓ Yes, in my childhood I used to have a bike which I used almost every day to ride with my friends, travel around my town and maybe just to go to the shop to buy some food for my family and come back with the bike.

Several issues: unnecessary filler words removed and verbs after 'used to' should be base forms or plain infinitives without 'to'. 'Ride' and 'travel' are correct base verbs. 'Go to the shop to buy' is the natural collocation; 'take some foods' is incorrect: 'food' is an uncountable noun so use 'some food' and 'buy' is the appropriate verb. Also 'that bike' changed to 'the bike' for natural reference. Suggestion: use base verb forms after 'used to', avoid fillers, and use correct collocations with countable/uncountable nouns.

× Yes, I think so. But it's not popular as other countries around the world.

✓ Yes, I think so. But it's not as popular as in other countries around the world.

Comparative structure requires 'not as ... as' and when comparing popularity between places include 'in' before 'other countries'. The original lacked 'as' after 'not' and the preposition 'in'. Suggestion: use the full comparative pattern 'not as + adjective + as' and include necessary prepositions.

× Like in the in Europe countries there are a lot of bikes you can see around cities or towns.

✓ For example, in European countries you can see many bikes around cities and towns.

Problems: duplicate 'in the in', incorrect adjective form 'Europe countries' should be 'European countries', and word order/choice improved ('a lot of bikes you can see' is awkward). Use 'many bikes' for countable plural and streamline sentence structure: 'in European countries you can see many bikes around cities and towns.' Suggestion: use correct adjective forms, avoid repetition, and choose natural word order.

× But in my country it's like less than other countries like we can, we cannot see old people are.

✓ But in my country there are fewer bikes than in other countries; for example, we rarely see many older people cycling.

Multiple errors: 'it's like less than other countries' is ungrammatical — use 'there are fewer bikes than in other countries' (fewer for countables). 'We can, we cannot see old people are' is incoherent; intended meaning likely that older people do not cycle often, so rephrase 'we rarely see many older people cycling.' Also use 'there are' to state existence and 'in other countries' with preposition. Suggestion: use comparative structures with 'fewer' for countable nouns, use 'there is/are' for existence, and express the observation about older people with 'see older people cycling'.