自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise, correct grammar, and use clearer linking words. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give 1–2 specific supporting details (e.g., when you learned, why you were scared, how you improved). Avoid repetition and fix tense/word choice (e.g., 'I was afraid of getting injured').

範例: Yes. I had a bike from about age seven. At first I was nervous about falling and getting injured, but after practicing regularly I became confident. Now I enjoy biking daily because it feels freeing and keeps me fit.

建議: Answer directly and give specific reasons using linking words. State your opinion clearly, then add 1–2 concrete reasons or examples (e.g., preference for cars, lack of cycling infrastructure). Avoid filler words and vague phrases like 'trending topic'.

範例: Not really. Most people prefer cars or motorbikes because cities lack safe bike lanes, and public transport is not well connected, so cycling is uncommon for daily travel.

× Yes, I did have a bike since when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.

The original sentence mixes past simple 'did have' with 'since when', which is incorrect. Use past simple 'had' to state possession in the past. 'Since when' is not needed; 'when I was a child' correctly specifies the time period. Use: 'I had a bike when I was a child.'

× At first I wasn't good at it and I am afraid of riding a bike because I'm afraid of having injury.

✓ At first I wasn't good at it and I was afraid of riding a bike because I feared getting injured.

The sentence mixes past ('wasn't good') with present ('I am afraid'), creating tense inconsistency. Use past tense 'was' and 'feared' to match the time frame. 'Having injury' is unidiomatic; use 'getting injured' or 'being injured.' Also avoid repeating 'afraid' twice; replace with 'feared' for variety and clarity.

× But eventually as I tried and tried and practiced and practiced, I eventually got addicted to it and couldn't stop biking for a day without a day without.

✓ But after I kept practicing, I eventually became addicted to it and couldn't go a day without biking.

The original contains unnecessary repetition ('tried and tried and practiced and practiced') and duplicate phrase 'for a day without a day without.' Simplify by using 'kept practicing' and the idiomatic expression 'couldn't go a day without biking.' Also use 'became addicted' (past simple) to match the past narrative.

× I don't think bikes are popular in my country because as I see it, it isn't uh. Trending topic in my country.

✓ I don't think bikes are popular in my country because, as I see it, they aren't a trending topic here.

The original has tense and number issues: 'bikes are' is plural but then 'it isn't' refers to singular 'it' incorrectly. Replace with 'they aren't' to match plural 'bikes.' 'Trending topic' should be preceded by an article: 'a trending topic.' Also 'in my country' repeated is redundant; 'here' is more natural. Remove filler 'uh.'