自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be concise, grammatically accurate and coherent. Start with a clear topic sentence that directly answers the question, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid tense errors and repetitions, and keep the answer within 3–4 sentences.

範例: No, I didn’t have a bike as a child. I tried riding once when I was 17 but fell and hurt myself, so I avoided cycling for a while. However, I still want to learn properly in the future, so I plan to practice with a friend until I feel confident.

建議: Answer directly, use clearer linking words and give a specific example or reason. Reduce hesitation sounds and repetitive phrases. Provide one concrete example or statistic if possible, and finish with a short concluding sentence to show completeness.

範例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because many people use them as their main means of transport. For example, students and factory workers often cycle to school or work since cars and motorcycles are expensive for many families. As a result, bicycles are a common and practical choice for daily travel.

× No, I haven't, but I hadn't, I had an experience with a bike.

✓ No, I didn't, but I had an experience with a bike.

The student used 'haven't' (present perfect) and 'hadn't' incorrectly when referring to a past event. The question asked about having a bike 'when you were a child' (past time), so past simple 'didn't' and 'had' are appropriate. Use past simple for completed past events with a specified time.

× Uh, I was 17, I was a teenager and uh, I unfortunately I fell, I fell down.

✓ I was 17; I was a teenager, and unfortunately I fell down.

Repetition 'I fell, I fell down' is unnecessary and there is a minor punctuation/flow issue. The past tense 'was' and 'fell' are correct; improve by removing duplicate and adding punctuation to clarify clauses.

× But it was a great experience though, because though I decided not to ride a bike again, but you know, I still have this thought of riding a bike in the future and I wanna practice it again.

✓ But it was a great experience; although I decided not to ride a bike again at the time, I still think about riding a bike in the future and want to practice again.

Multiple conjunctions ('though', 'because', 'but') create redundancy and awkward structure. Use a single subordinating conjunction (although) and keep tense consistent: 'decided' (past) and 'still think' (present) fits the meaning. Avoid informal 'wanna' in formal speech; use 'want to'.

× I think bikes are popular in my country because I've seen a lot of people using it as transportation.

✓ I think bikes are popular in my country because I've seen a lot of people using them as transportation.

Pronoun 'it' is singular but refers to 'bikes' (plural); use 'them'. The present perfect 'I've seen' is acceptable for past experiences with present relevance.

× Umm, most of the people in my country don't have cars or even motorcycles.

✓ Most people in my country don't have cars or motorcycles.

'Most of the people' is wordy; 'most people' is natural. 'Or even' is acceptable colloquially but unnecessary. The sentence is otherwise grammatically correct.

× So, uh, they have bicycles with them when they go to school and they go to work and wherever they want to.

✓ So they have bicycles when they go to school, to work, or wherever they need to go.

'With them' is redundant after 'have bicycles'; 'wherever they want to' is informal and vague—use 'wherever they need to go' or 'wherever they go'. Improve parallelism: 'go to school, to work, or wherever...'.

× And it's, it's really nice because, umm, many people are also, uh.

✓ And it's really nice because many people also use bicycles.

The original sentence is incomplete and contains hesitations. Complete the thought by specifying what 'many people are also' do: 'use bicycles'. Remove filler sounds for clarity.