自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and structured: start with a clear topic sentence (Yes/No + brief context), then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition (e.g., don’t repeat ‘I fell’ twice) and correct tense and grammar (use past simple: practiced, decided). Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

範例: No, I didn’t have a bike as a child. I learned to ride when I was 17 and practised with a friend, but I fell and hurt myself. Because of that accident, I decided not to ride for a long time, although I’m thinking of trying again now.

建議: Give a clear topic sentence, then add specific supporting reasons and one brief example. Use linking words (for example, especially, because) and avoid vague phrases like ‘a lot’. Try to vary vocabulary (popular, common, convenient) and keep sentences concise.

範例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because many students and commuters use them for short journeys. For example, students who live far from school find bikes convenient and cost-effective, especially in towns where public transport is limited.

× I didn't have a bike, but I had experience with a bike before when I was 17.

✓ I didn't have a bike as a child, but I had experience riding a bike when I was 17.

The original mixes time references and uses awkward phrasing 'experience with a bike before when I was 17.' Use past simple consistently for a completed past event and a clearer verb: 'had experience riding a bike when I was 17.' Also clarify 'as a child' to match the examiner's question about childhood.

× I practice it with a friend and unfortunately I fell.

✓ I was practicing with a friend and unfortunately I fell.

The original uses present simple 'I practice' to describe a past action. Use past continuous 'was practicing' to show an ongoing past action that was interrupted by the fall. This keeps tense consistent with the following past event 'I fell.'

× I fell down with my bike and after that I've decided not to ride a bike again because of that incident.

✓ I fell off my bike, and after that I decided not to ride a bike again because of that incident.

Use the correct verb-preposition combination 'fell off' for leaving a bicycle. Also change present perfect 'I've decided' to past simple 'I decided' because the decision occurred after a past event and is described in a past narrative.

× But well, right now I am.

✓ But well, right now I am not riding one.

The original sentence is incomplete and lacks a clear verb or object. Completing it as 'I am not riding one' makes the meaning explicit and grammatically complete, matching the previous statement about deciding not to ride a bike.

× I think it's popular in my country because a lot of students at school have bikes with them and it's very convenient, especially to those students who live far from school, which is really good because they use bikes as transportation to go to school.

✓ I think bikes are popular in my country because many students bring them to school, and they are very convenient, especially for students who live far from school, since they use bikes as transportation to get to school.

Several issues: 'it's popular' is awkward—refer to 'bikes' with plural 'are popular.' 'A lot of students at school have bikes with them' is wordy; 'many students bring them to school' is clearer. Use 'for students' not 'to those students.' Replace 'which is really good because' with 'since' to link cause and effect concisely. Use 'get to school' as a natural collocation.