自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be concise, grammatically correct, and coherent. Start with a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, avoid filler words, correct tense and pronouns, and provide one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Limit to 2–4 sentences. For example, use past simple for past possession: “I didn’t have a bike when I was a child in China.” Then add a clear detail: “However, I did have a pink bicycle later, which I used to ride around my neighborhood.”

範例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child in China. However, I later owned a pink bicycle that I used to ride around my neighborhood every weekend.

建議: Give a clear direct answer and support it with specific reasons and examples. Use linking words (because, for example, also) and avoid repetition. Use plural/singular correctly and be more balanced (not only boys). Keep to 2–4 sentences. For example, explain why they are popular and mention contexts where people use bikes.

範例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are affordable and convenient for short trips. For example, many people use bicycles to commute to work or to go to the market, and you can see riders of all ages in both cities and small towns.

× Uh, no, I didn't have a bike in when I, I were in China.

✓ Uh, no, I didn't have a bike when I was in China.

The student used 'in when' (redundant) and 'were' with singular first person; the correct past tense for singular is 'was'. Remove 'in' before 'when' and use 'was' to match singular subject 'I'. Suggestion: say 'I didn't have a bike when I was in China.'

× I was child uh, but I have a bicycle.

✓ I was a child, but I had a bicycle.

The student mixes past and present tenses: 'was' (past) then 'have' (present). Also missing article 'a' before 'child'. To keep consistent past narrative use 'had' for possession in the past and include 'a'. Suggestion: 'I was a child, but I had a bicycle.'

× Uh, we, uh, its colour is it, it was a pink bicycle.

✓ Uh, it was a pink bicycle; its color was pink.

The student misused pronouns and word order: 'we' is incorrect if referring to the bicycle; 'its colour is it' is ungrammatical. Choose a clear subject ('it' referring to the bicycle) and maintain past tense 'was'. Also avoid duplicating information. Suggestion: 'It was a pink bicycle.' or 'Its color was pink.'

× Yes, I think bikes are so popular in my country because everyone likes to ride the bike bikes and most of the boys are riding the bike.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country because everyone likes to ride bikes and most of the boys ride bikes.

Repeated and inconsistent noun forms ('the bike bikes', 'the bike') and informal 'so popular' should be 'very popular' for clarity. Use plural 'bikes' after 'ride' and use simple present 'ride' for habitual actions ('most of the boys ride bikes'). Remove unnecessary 'the'. Suggestion: 'Bikes are very popular... everyone likes to ride bikes and most boys ride bikes.'