自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Clarify tense and give a concise, coherent reply. Start with a clear topic sentence about whether you had a bike, then add one or two specific supporting details (how often you rode, where you rode, a short memory). Use correct past-tense verbs and simple linking words (for example, “Yes, I did. When I was a child…” or “No, I didn’t, but…”). Keep it to no more than four or five sentences.

範例: Yes, I did. When I was a child I had a small red bike and I rode it almost every day after school. For example, I used to cycle to my friend’s house and around the neighborhood, which helped me learn balance and gain confidence.

建議: Answer directly and use clearer vocabulary and grammar. Begin with a clear opinion, then support it with specific reasons and an example. Use linking words such as “because,” “for example,” or “also.” Correct common errors: say “bikes” not “buying,” and use phrases like “people use them to commute.” Keep responses concise and focused.

範例: Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country because many people use them to commute to work and avoid traffic. For example, in my city lots of commuters cycle to the subway station in the morning, and there are growing numbers of bike lanes to support them.

× This hour I have I had a bike and I often use that or go somewhere.

✓ When I was a child I had a bike and I often used it to go places.

The original sentence mixes present and past tenses and has awkward word order. Use past tense consistently for a past time frame ('When I was a child') and place the subject and verbs in correct order. Replace 'this hour I have I had' with 'When I was a child I had', change 'often use' to past 'often used', and use the correct object pronoun 'it' and the natural phrase 'to go places'. Suggested improvement: decide the time frame first (past), then use past verbs and natural phrasing.

× Yeah, I think buying is very popular in my country because I say a lot of people use my travel for go to work or they want to go somewhere.

✓ Yes, I think buying bikes is very popular in my country because many people use them to travel to work or to go somewhere.

The sentence contains incorrect verbs and unnatural phrasing. Replace 'buying' with the clearer noun phrase 'buying bikes' or 'bicycles.' 'I say a lot of people' is incorrect — use 'many people' or 'I think many people'. 'Use my travel' is wrong; use 'use them to travel' and change 'for go to work' to 'to travel to work' or 'to go to work'. Ensure subject-verb agreement and correct infinitive use ('to go'). Suggested improvement: simplify the sentence, use correct quantifiers ('many'), correct pronouns ('them' for bikes), and use 'to' before verbs of purpose.