自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be direct, use correct tense and grammar, avoid filler words, and give a concise explanation with one or two supporting details. Begin with a clear topic sentence (e.g., “No, I didn’t have a bike as a child.”), then briefly explain why and add a specific detail or memory. Use past tense consistently and remove hesitations like “like” or “you know.”

範例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. My parents didn’t allow me to ride one because they thought it was unsafe for young children, so I usually walked to school instead.

建議: Give a clear direct opinion first, then support it with specific reasons or facts. Avoid repetition and filler words. Use linking words (however, although, because) to structure your answer and be more precise with comparisons (e.g., give a rough proportion or example). Aim for 2–3 sentences only.

範例: Bikes are fairly popular in my country, especially in rural areas and among commuters. For example, many people choose motorcycles because they are cheaper and easier to park, although cars are becoming more common in cities due to rising incomes.

× I know I remember it like very well.

✓ I remember it very well.

The original contains an unnecessary 'I know' which is colloquial and disrupts tense/clarity. Use simple present 'I remember' to state a present memory. Remove filler 'like' and adverb position change: place 'very well' after the verb for natural word order.

× Like I don't have bike at that time because we are not allowed to ride a bike because we are children's at that time.

✓ I didn't have a bike at that time because we weren't allowed to ride bikes when we were children.

Multiple errors: tense mismatch (use past 'didn't have' not present 'don't have'), article missing before 'bike' ('a bike'), incorrect plural/singular and possessive ('children's' is wrong; use 'children' as plural noun), incorrect auxiliary for past passive ('weren't allowed'). Also replace 'at that time' with 'when we were children' for clarity and use plural 'bikes' after 'ride'.

× I'm not sure about the comparison like the bikes are are still popular or not but I can say like it depends on their on person to person.

✓ I'm not sure whether bikes are still popular, but I can say it depends from person to person.

Fix doubled word 'are are' and awkward 'about the comparison like'. Use 'whether' to introduce the clause. Remove filler 'like' and correct preposition: 'depends on' or 'depends from'—standard is 'depends on person to person' or better 'depends from person to person' though 'depends on the person' is preferable. Here chosen 'depends from person to person' to convey variability; alternatively 'depends on the person'.

× We can say like if they love to ride bike then usually they have otherwise I don't think so.

✓ We can say that if someone loves to ride a bike, they usually have one; otherwise, I don't think so.

Pronoun reference 'they' unclear; use 'someone' for a general person. Include article 'a bike' and 'one' to avoid repetition. Add commas and conjunctions for sentence clarity and natural structure. Use present simple 'loves' for general truths.

× We have a lot of bikes as compared to cars because it's 5050.

✓ We have a lot more bikes than cars; it's about 50/50.

'as compared to' is wordy; use 'more ... than' for comparison. 'it's 5050' should be written 'it's about 50/50' to indicate proportion. Use numerals or '50/50' with slash for clarity and include 'about' if approximate.