自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence answering the question, avoid fillers (uh, um) and irrelevant reasons (gender stereotype). If you need to explain, give a brief, specific reason and one short supporting detail. Use correct tense (past) and simple grammar.

範例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. My parents thought it was unsafe for me to ride on busy streets, so they didn’t buy one. As a result, I usually walked or took public transport to school.

建議: Give a clear, grammatical statement first, then add one or two specific supporting points using linking words (because, for example, so). Avoid repetition and incorrect word choices (e.g., 'consuming'). Use varied but appropriate vocabulary (popular, common, widely used).

範例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are cheap and convenient for short trips. For example, many people use bicycles to commute to work or to go shopping, especially in crowded urban areas.

× Uh, well, this is an interesting question. When I was a child, uh, I don't uh, have a bike because, uh, I'm a girl and it was not a, a good thing.

✓ Uh, well, this is an interesting question. When I was a child, I did not have a bike because I was a girl and it was not considered a good thing.

The student is speaking about the past but uses present tense 'don't have'. This is a tense error (Present tense issue). Use the past simple 'did not have' and 'was' to match the past time reference. Also replace 'it was not a, a good thing' with 'it was not considered a good thing' to make the sentence natural and complete. Suggestion: when referring to past facts, use past simple verbs (did not have, was).

× Yeah, why not? Uh, bikes are extremely popular in my country are one of the most used uh, type of uh, vehicle that are most frequently are uh, consuming by the uh, individual in my country, so.

✓ Yeah, why not? Bikes are extremely popular in my country and are one of the most-used types of vehicles that are most frequently used by individuals in my country.

The original sentence has multiple subject-verb agreement and structure problems. 'Bikes are extremely popular in my country are one of the most used type of vehicle' repeats verbs and mismatches plural/singular forms. Correct structure: 'Bikes ... are one of the most-used types of vehicles' (plural 'types' and 'vehicles' to agree with 'bikes'). Also 'are ... consuming by' is wrong; 'used by' is the correct passive form. Suggestion: simplify: 'Bikes are extremely popular in my country and are one of the most frequently used types of vehicles.'