自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Improve grammar, clarity and coherence. Begin with a clear topic sentence in past tense, correct verb forms and pronouns, and avoid irrelevant words. Keep answer natural and concise (1–3 sentences). Add one specific detail about the bike to enrich the answer and use a linking word if you add another clause.

範例: Yes, I had a bicycle when I was a child. My mother bought it for my seventh birthday, and I used to ride it every afternoon around the neighborhood.

建議: Use correct subject-verb agreement and clearer sentence structure. Start with a direct opinion sentence, then support it with 1–2 specific reasons and a linking word (e.g., because, so, therefore). Be specific about who prefers cars or motorbikes and give a brief comparison or consequence.

範例: In my opinion, bicycles are not very popular in my country because most people commute long distances, so they prefer cars or motorbikes. For example, office workers often travel far for work, which makes motorbikes and cars more practical than bikes.

× Yes I have one bike winner versus shower.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.

The student used present tense 'have' but the question asks about the past ('when you were a child'), so past tense 'had' is required (see Past tense issue, ID 5). Also the phrase 'winner versus shower' is meaningless and likely a misphrase; it should be removed to make a clear answer. Use a comma after 'Yes' for natural spoken punctuation. Suggestion: match the tense to the question and remove unclear words.'

× My mom bought it to me because she kept me on my birthday.

✓ My mom bought it for me because she gave it to me on my birthday.

The correct preposition for receiving an object from someone is 'for' in 'bought it for me', not 'to'. The verb 'kept' is incorrect here; 'gave it to me' or 'bought it for me on my birthday' expresses the intended meaning. Also 'on my birthday' is the correct phrase to indicate the occasion. Suggestion: use 'bought it for me' and 'on my birthday' to convey the meaning clearly.'

× Well in my opinion bikes is not important at all in my country because many people in last used cars and motorbike because they have to work far from their home so that's why their preferred car motorbikes.

✓ Well, in my opinion, bikes are not important at all in my country because many people nowadays use cars and motorbikes since they have to work far from their homes, so they prefer cars and motorbikes.

There are multiple issues: 'bikes is' shows subject-verb agreement error—plural 'bikes' needs plural verb 'are' (ID 27/1). 'in last' is incorrect preposition/phrase; use 'nowadays' or 'in the past' depending on meaning (ID 11). 'used cars and motorbike' should be 'use cars and motorbikes' to match present habitual meaning (present tense issue, ID 6). 'they have to work far from their home' should be 'far from their homes' for pronoun-number agreement (ID 12/1). 'their preferred car motorbikes' is wrong word order and form; use 'they prefer cars and motorbikes.' Suggestions: ensure subject-verb agreement, use correct time adverb ('nowadays'), maintain consistent plural forms, and use clear conjunctions such as 'since' or 'because' for reasons.'