自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Improve grammatical accuracy and sentence clarity. Start with a direct topic sentence, correct tense and modal usage, and avoid redundancy. Use one or two supporting details linked by a clear connector. For example, correct errors like “can afford” → “couldn’t afford” and simplify the second sentence: “So I often borrowed a classmate’s bike to learn.”

範例: I didn’t have my own bike as a child because my parents couldn’t afford one. However, I often borrowed a classmate’s bike so I could learn to ride and practice after school.

建議: Make sentences more natural and precise, use plural and articles correctly, and add a specific example or reason. Begin with a clear topic sentence, then add supporting details linked by connectors like “because” or “for example.”

範例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. They were widely used by older generations because they were affordable and practical; for example, many rural families still rely on bikes for short trips to markets and schools.

× Unfortunately I didn't have a bike on my own when I was a child because my parents can afford to buy me one.

✓ Unfortunately I didn't have a bike of my own when I was a child because my parents couldn't afford to buy me one.

The sentence uses the present modal 'can' but the context is past ability/possibility; use 'couldn't' to indicate past inability. Also 'on my own' is less natural than 'of my own' for possession. Suggestion: use the past modal form (could/couldn't) when talking about past ability or circumstance and choose idiomatic possession 'of my own'.

× So what I did was in order to experience to ride a bike is that I borrowed my classmates bike every time it was.

✓ So what I did to experience riding a bike was borrow my classmate's bike whenever I could.

The original mixes awkward structures: 'in order to experience to ride' is incorrect; after 'experience' use the -ing form (experiencing/riding). Also 'what I did was' should be followed by a base verb 'borrow' for a cleft construction, and 'classmates' needs an apostrophe to show possession. 'Every time it was' is incomplete; use 'whenever I could' to express frequency. Suggestion: simplify the sentence structure and use 'riding' after 'experience', and use possessive form 'classmate's'.

× Back then bike was already popular in our country and I think it was the first vehicle that our great grandparents rode.

✓ Back then bikes were already popular in our country and I think they were the first vehicles that our great-grandparents rode.

Countable nouns require correct singular/plural agreement. 'Bike' should be plural ('bikes') to match 'were popular', and 'great grandparents' should be hyphenated optionally but they need plural agreement with 'they were'. Also 'vehicle' should be plural ('vehicles') if referring to bikes in general. Suggestion: match noun number with verbs and overall meaning.

× And up until now, some people are still using bikes to go to other places.

✓ And even now, some people still use bikes to get to other places.

Present continuous 'are still using' can be acceptable but simple present 'still use' is more natural for habitual actions. 'To go to other places' is wordy; 'to get to other places' or 'to go to places' is better. Suggestion: use simple present for habitual actions and choose concise verbs like 'use' and 'get'.