自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Make your answer more natural and concise: start with a clear topic sentence, correct grammar (especially verb tenses and articles), avoid redundancy, and use linking words to connect ideas. Add one specific supporting detail (e.g., where you rode it or a memory) and keep to under five sentences. Also correct vocabulary errors (e.g., "track a balance" → "keep my balance").

範例: Yes, I did. I got my first bike when I was about six, and at first I needed a lot of help from my parents because I couldn’t keep my balance. However, after a few weeks of practice I became more confident and enjoyed riding to the park near my house.

建議: Improve accuracy and clarity: correct vocabulary and grammar ("break" → "bikes"; tense and article use). Use a clear topic sentence, one or two specific supporting details (who uses bikes, for what reasons), and a linking word to connect ideas. Avoid awkward phrases like "relaxing us a healthy lifestyle" — say "promote a healthy lifestyle" instead.

範例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country. Many students and office workers cycle to school or work because it is cheap and often faster than driving, and it also promotes a healthy lifestyle and reduces traffic congestion.

× Yes, I did have a bike when I was a child and I have my first bike when I was around 6 year old.

✓ Yes, I did have a bike when I was a child and I had my first bike when I was around 6 years old.

Mixed past tense: 'did have' is past, but 'have' is present; both events are in the past so use past simple 'had'. Also '6 year old' needs plural 'years' and to be used as '6 years old'. Suggestion: keep consistent past tense for past events and use 'years' for age expressions.

× And when I ride the bike I need many guidelines and help with my parents 'cause I find it really difficult to track a balance and but I think riding a bike is a really interesting experience.

✓ And when I rode the bike I needed a lot of guidance and help from my parents because I found it really difficult to keep my balance, but I think riding a bike was a really interesting experience.

Tense consistency: the context refers to childhood, so use past simple ('rode', 'needed', 'found', 'was'). Word choice: 'guidelines' is incorrect here; use 'guidance' or 'help'. Preposition: use 'from my parents' not 'with my parents'. 'Track a balance' is wrong; use 'keep my balance'. Remove the extra conjunction 'and' before 'but'. Use commas to separate clauses. Suggestion: maintain past tense for past experiences and prefer 'guidance' and 'keep my balance'.

× Yes, I think break are popular in my country.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are popular in my country.

Wrong noun 'break' used instead of 'bikes'. Also ensure plural 'bikes' to match plural verb 'are'. Suggestion: use the correct plural noun 'bikes'.

× People will ride the bike to their schools and to their workplace and riding the bike is relaxing us a healthy lifestyle.

✓ People ride bikes to their schools and workplaces, and riding a bike is a relaxing, healthy lifestyle choice.

Use of 'will' is inappropriate for a general fact; use present simple 'ride' for habitual actions. Use plural 'bikes' and 'workplaces'. Phrase 'is relaxing us a healthy lifestyle' is ungrammatical: use 'is a relaxing, healthy lifestyle choice' or 'helps people live a healthy lifestyle'. Suggestion: use present simple for habits and rephrase to a natural collocation like 'relaxing, healthy lifestyle choice'.