自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答が伝えたい内容は明確ですが、文法ミス、重複、語順の乱れが目立ちます。改善点は以下です：1) 主題文を明確にして一文で答える。2) 不要な繰り返し（"I I", "could ride my"）を避ける。3) 動詞の時制と目的語を正しく使う（"could ride it"）。4) 補足情報は1〜2文に留め、接続詞（"after that", "so"など）を使って流れを整える。5) 単語の選択を自然にする（"went to many places"など）。

範例: Yes. My parents gave me a bike when I was a child. I practiced a lot and eventually I could ride it by myself, so I often went to many places around my neighborhood on my bike.

建議: 主張は伝わりますが、流暢さと語法に問題があります。改善点：1) 冗長な語や繰り返し（"uh", "in my in my", "so, so"）を減らす。2) 比較表現を整理して明確に述べる（"cars are more common than motorcycles"）。3) 理由を具体的に一つか二つ挙げる（例：交通の発達、収入の増加）。4) 接続詞（"because", "therefore"）を使って論理的につなぐ。

範例: I don't think bikes are very popular. Cars are more common in my country because urban development and higher incomes make car ownership easier, so many people prefer cars to motorcycles.

× Yes, when I was a child I was given my bike by my parents and I practiced so hard and finally I I could ride my and after I could ride myself I I went a lot of place by my bike.

✓ Yes, when I was a child my parents gave me a bike, and I practiced so hard that I could finally ride it. After I learned to ride, I went to many places by bike.

The sentence contains multiple past tense and structure problems. 'I was given my bike by my parents' is passive past but more natural active: 'my parents gave me a bike' (past simple). The sequence of actions needs clear subordinating structure: use 'practiced so hard that I could finally ride it' to show result. 'After I could ride myself' is ungrammatical; use 'After I learned to ride'. 'I went a lot of place' needs plural 'many places'. Suggestion: keep consistent past simple for completed childhood actions and use clear connectors like 'that' and 'after' to show sequence.

× I don't think so because, uh, in my in my society it is more famous the car it uh, the bike.

✓ I don't think so because in my society cars are more popular than bikes.

The phrase 'more famous the car it the bike' is incorrect word order and word choice. Use 'more popular' rather than 'more famous' for common preference. Plural 'cars' and 'bikes' is required when speaking generally. Also use comparative structure 'X are more popular than Y'. Suggestion: use 'cars are more popular than bikes' for clear, natural comparison.

× So, so a lot of people use, use more car use cars more than motorbikes.

✓ So a lot of people use cars more than motorbikes.

Redundant words removed and subject-verb agreement fixed: 'use cars' matches plural subject 'a lot of people'. Original had inconsistent singular 'car' with plural subject. Suggestion: simplify to 'a lot of people use cars more than motorbikes' and avoid repeating words.