自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is clear and personal, but it's a bit long and slightly repetitive. To improve: 1) Start with a concise topic sentence directly answering the question. 2) Use one or two specific supporting details (for example, a short anecdote or age) and link them with a connective. 3) Avoid repeating the same idea (e.g., 'good memory' and 'helped me to bond' are similar). Also watch minor grammar/word choices (use "uncomfortable" or "afraid" rather than repeating "scared").

範例: I didn't have a bike as a child; instead, I had a scooter that I used often. For example, when I was eight my older brother taught me to ride it and stayed by my side until I felt confident, which turned into one of my fondest childhood memories.

建議: Your answer addresses the question but has several problems: unclear word choices ('cranny', 'the father') and some grammar errors. To improve: 1) Use clear vocabulary (e.g., 'rainy' or 'cold' months). 2) Provide a brief explanation and a contrast with who does use bikes (if possible). 3) Keep it to two or three sentences and use linking words such as 'because' and 'therefore' correctly.

範例: I wouldn't say bikes are very popular in my country because of the weather — it's often rainy and cold. Therefore, many people prefer driving or taking public transport, though some students and cyclists in cities still use bikes for short trips.

× When I was a child, I didn't have a bike, however, I had a scooter.

✓ When I was a child, I didn't have a bike; however, I had a scooter.

The original sentence uses a comma before a contrasting connector 'however', which creates a run-on sentence (comma splice). This is a sentence structure/punctuation issue but falls under correcting tense-related sentence: keep past tense verbs 'didn't have' and 'had'. Replace the comma with a semicolon before 'however' to correctly join two independent clauses. Suggestion: use a semicolon or start a new sentence: '...bike. However, I had a scooter.' Note: tense usage (past) is correct, so only punctuation needed.

× I remember riding my scooter with my older brother.

✓ I remember riding my scooter with my older brother.

This sentence is correct. The verb 'remember' is in present tense to recall a past event, and 'riding' correctly uses the -ing form after 'remember' to refer to a past activity. No change needed.

× He really helped me a lot to overcome my fear because I was scared to ride a scooter.

✓ He really helped me a lot to overcome my fear because I was scared of riding a scooter.

Use of 'scared to ride' is understandable but less idiomatic. 'Scared of riding' or 'scared to ride' both appear, but 'scared of riding' is more natural collocation. Maintain past tense 'was scared.' Also keep infinitive structure after 'helped' is acceptable, so main correction is preposition/verb form choice (idiomatic). Suggestion: use 'scared of riding' or 'afraid to ride'.

× This is a good childhood memory.

✓ That is a good childhood memory.

Using 'This is' while speaking about a past memory is acceptable but 'That is a good childhood memory' is more natural when referring back to the earlier statement. Tense remains present when evaluating a past memory; change 'This' to 'That' for better deixis. No tense change required.

× It really helped me to bond with my brother.

✓ It really helped me bond with my brother.

Both 'helped me to bond' and 'helped me bond' are grammatical; the latter is slightly more natural in spoken English. Keep past tense 'helped'. Suggest dropping 'to' after 'helped me' for conciseness.

× I wouldn't say bikes are popular in my country mainly because of the weather condition.

✓ I wouldn't say bikes are popular in my country mainly because of the weather conditions.

Use plural 'conditions' when referring to general weather patterns (multiple aspects/seasons). The rest of the sentence is correct. Suggestion: use 'weather conditions' or 'the weather'.

× During cranny and winter months, the father makes it unpractical to ride a bike, so people prefer to drive or use public transportation.

✓ During the rainy and winter months, the weather makes it impractical to ride a bike, so people prefer to drive or use public transportation.

Several issues: 'cranny' is likely a typo for 'rainy'; 'the father' is incorrect and likely intended 'the weather'; 'unpractical' is nonstandard—use 'impractical'. This is a sentence structure and word-choice problem. Corrections: replace 'cranny' with 'rainy', 'the father' with 'the weather', and 'unpractical' with 'impractical'. Keep present tense 'makes' to describe general truth. Suggestion: 'During the rainy and winter months, the weather makes it impractical to ride a bike, so people prefer to drive or use public transportation.'