自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be concise and keep tense consistent. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct verb tenses (use past for childhood), and avoid repetition. Also give a short specific example (where you rode or a memory) to enrich the answer.

範例: Yes. I had a bike when I was a child and I used to ride it every evening. For example, I often cycled with my father along the riverside near our house, which helped me learn balance and made our evenings enjoyable.

建議: Answer directly, then support with two specific reasons using linking words. Avoid repetition and finish your thought. Use clearer vocabulary (e.g., inexpensive, convenient) and complete the sentence about limitations (carrying goods, weather, safety).

範例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are inexpensive and convenient for short trips. However, when people need to carry heavy goods or travel long distances, they usually choose motorcycles or cars instead.

× I had a bike in my childhood time and I ride on my bike in my free time in the evening.

✓ I had a bike in my childhood, and I rode my bike in the evenings in my free time.

The sentence mixes past and present tenses incorrectly. The speaker refers to childhood (past), so actions related to that period should be in the past tense. 'I ride' should be 'I rode'. Also 'in my childhood time' is awkward; use 'in my childhood'. Use plural 'evenings' for habitual past action.

× After that I also ride in different roads.

✓ After that, I also rode on different roads.

The verb 'ride' is in present tense while narrating past events. Change to past tense 'rode'. Also use the preposition 'on' with 'roads' and plural 'roads' for multiple routes.

× I always go outside with my father on a bike.

✓ I always went out with my father on a bike.

The adverb 'always' with a past time reference ('when you were a child') requires past tense 'went' rather than present 'go'. Use 'went out' rather than 'go outside' for natural past narration.

× Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because people prefer to go outside by travel by bike because it is very cheap and more convenient.

✓ Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because people prefer to travel by bike; it is very cheap and convenient.

The original sentence has redundant words ('go outside by travel by bike') and awkward structure. 'Prefer to travel by bike' is the correct collocation. Also use semicolon or conjunction to join clauses; 'more convenient' should be 'convenient' when not comparing explicitly.

× However, when they want to carry lots of.

✓ However, when they want to carry a lot of items, they use other vehicles.

The sentence is incomplete and lacks an object and a main clause. Add 'items' after 'a lot of' and finish the thought with a main clause such as 'they use other vehicles' to make it a complete sentence.