自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be concise and correct grammar; start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and fix verb forms (e.g., “was too traumatised” and remove duplicate phrases).

範例: Yes. I had a bike when I was 12, but I stopped riding it after a serious accident. Because I was badly shaken by the crash, I felt too traumatised to ride again, so I gave it up for several years.

建議: Keep a clear topic sentence and add specific supporting details with correct vocabulary and linking words. Correct small errors (e.g., “whift” → “weave” or “filter”) and add one brief example to make the answer more concrete.

範例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. In particular, many people in workshops and manual jobs prefer motorbikes because they are inexpensive, fuel-efficient and let riders weave through traffic. For example, my uncle uses a motorbike to commute and reaches work much faster than by car.

× I had a bike when I was 12 years old but after that when I went into an accident I just too traumatised to use a bike anymore so I stopped using it after after I got into that accident.

✓ I had a bike when I was 12 years old, but after I had an accident I was too traumatized to use a bike anymore, so I stopped using it.

The original sentence contains incorrect verb forms for past events. The phrase 'when I went into an accident' is unnatural; use the simple past passive/active 'I had an accident' or 'I was in an accident.' Also 'I just too traumatised' is missing the past-tense linking verb 'was' and uses an unnecessary 'just.' Redundant repetition 'after after' should be removed. Suggestions: use clear past-tense verbs for past events ('I had an accident', 'I was too traumatized') and avoid repetition and filler words.

× Most people who work in small workshops or do manual jobs prefer motorbikes because they are cheap, fuel efficient and allow them to whift through traffic and reach work quickly.

✓ Most people who work in small workshops or do manual jobs prefer motorbikes because they are cheap, fuel-efficient, and allow them to whiz through traffic and reach work quickly.

Errors include a misspelled verb 'whift' (should be 'whiz' or 'weave') and missing hyphen in the compound adjective 'fuel-efficient.' The list of adjectives needs a comma before the conjunction for clarity (serial comma optional by style). Suggestion: correct spelling, hyphenate compound adjectives when they modify a noun, and ensure verbs are appropriate in meaning ('whiz' or 'weave').