自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words (uh, umm), and add one specific supporting detail (e.g., colour, who taught you, or where you rode it). Use a linking word if you add a second detail.

範例: Yes—I had a small red training bike with stabilisers when I was about five. My father taught me to ride it in the park, and I practised there every weekend until I could balance without the wheels.

建議: Answer directly with a topic sentence, avoid vague phrases and filler, and use linking words for coherence. Provide a specific supporting detail or example (statistics, typical users, or time of day) and correct small grammar issues (e.g., "that is" with singular/plural agreement).

範例: Yes, bikes are very popular in Japan. For example, many commuters cycle to work on dedicated bike paths, so you can see thousands of bicycles around train stations every morning.

× That's still extremely popular.

✓ That's still extremely popular.

No correction needed. The sentence correctly uses 'That's' as contraction of 'That is' and 'popular' as adjective. It matches question context and tense, so no third person singular verb error exists.

× And a lot of people, they use bikes to commute to work.

✓ A lot of people use bikes to commute to work.

The original sentence contains a redundant subject pronoun 'they' after 'a lot of people', which creates an unnecessary repetition. Remove 'they' to maintain correct subject usage and natural English: 'A lot of people use bikes to commute to work.'

× Yes, I did have a bike. Uh, it was a training bike with training wheels at the, umm, ends.

✓ Yes, I did have a bike. It was a training bike with training wheels on the ends.

The preposition 'at' is incorrect in this context. Use 'on' to indicate the position of the training wheels attached to the ends of the bike's axle. Also remove filler 'Uh' and 'umm' for clarity. The corrected phrase is 'training wheels on the ends.'

× So umm, there's a lot of bicycles running around in the morning.

✓ So, there are a lot of bicycles on the road in the morning.

'There' construction must agree in number with the noun: 'bicycles' is plural, so use 'there are' not 'there's' (a contraction of 'there is'). Also 'running around' is informal and slightly odd for bicycles; use 'on the road' or 'around' for clarity. Remove filler 'umm' for fluency.'

× There's even a segmented sidewalk just for bikes in Japan.

✓ There is even a segmented sidewalk just for bikes in Japan.

No article error in content, but expanded contraction for formality: 'There is' instead of 'There's'. The sentence is otherwise correct. If specifying one of many sidewalks, use an article as needed (e.g., 'a segmented sidewalk'). Here 'a segmented sidewalk' is correct and retained.