自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Improve tense accuracy, sentence structure and clarity. Start with a clear topic sentence in past tense, then give one or two concise supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and incorrect word order.

範例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My hometown had a very long street, so people often rode bicycles instead of walking. Because the road was safe and quiet, I enjoyed cycling every day to visit friends and run small errands.

建議: Make your opinion clear and support it with specific reasons using linking words. Use correct subject-verb agreement and avoid ambiguous pronouns. Limit to 2–3 sentences for clarity.

範例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. Many people prefer bicycles or motorcycles because distances can be long, and riding is faster than walking; additionally, cycling is good exercise and helps people stay healthy.

× I have a bike when I was a child because in in my hometown is have a street that quite long and people don't need to walk and they just need to ride a bicycle.

✓ I had a bike when I was a child because in my hometown there was a street that was quite long, so people did not need to walk and could just ride a bicycle.

Multiple issues: 5 Past tense issue and 27 Subject-verb agreement and 22 Article errors and 3 There be issue and 26 Sentence structure errors. The speaker mixes present tense 'have' with past time 'when I was a child'; use past tense 'had'. The phrase 'in in' is duplicated. English requires a 'there' construction for existence: 'there was a street'. Adjectival description needs a linking verb: 'that was quite long'. Coordinate the reason with 'so' and match tense in the clause: 'did not need' and use modal/ability 'could' for possibility. Suggestions: keep past tense throughout, remove duplicate words, use 'there was' for existence, and connect clauses with 'so' or 'so that'.

× Obviously it's quite a lot of people have a bike or motorcycle because it's have a long walk and they didn't want to walk and they can have her exercise that's good for their health.

✓ Obviously, quite a lot of people have a bike or motorcycle because their commutes are long and they do not want to walk, and they can get exercise, which is good for their health.

Issues: 6 Present tense issue, 27 Subject-verb agreement, 12 Incorrect use of pronouns, 22 Article errors, 26 Sentence structure errors. The original mixes 'it's quite a lot of people have' which is ungrammatical; use 'quite a lot of people have' or 'there are quite a lot of people who have'. 'It's have a long walk' is incorrect: use 'their commutes are long' or 'they have a long walk' with correct subject-verb agreement. 'They can have her exercise' uses 'her' incorrectly; use 'get exercise' or 'have exercise'. Keep present tense for general facts ('have', 'do not want'). Suggestions: use clearer subject-verb structures ('people have', 'their commutes are long'), correct pronouns ('their'), and use 'get exercise' to indicate obtaining exercise.