自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Improve grammar, verb tense and sentence clarity. Start with a clear topic sentence, use past simple for past events, avoid repetition, and limit to 3–4 short sentences. Add one or two specific supporting details (e.g. how often, where you rode, a memory) and use linking words (for example, “and”, “so”, “because”).

範例: Yes. I got my first bike when I was eight because my father bought it for me. I rode it to school and to my grandparents’ house almost every day. I also often went fishing with my dad, and we cycled together to the river.

建議: Make the answer more natural and grammatical: begin with a clear topic sentence, then give 2–3 specific reasons using linking words (for example, “because”, “also”, “for instance”). Use correct collocations (ride a bike, go to school, short trips) and avoid spelling errors. Keep to 3–4 sentences.

範例: Yes, bicycles are very popular in Vietnam. For example, many students ride their bikes to school in groups because it is convenient and inexpensive. Bicycles are also easy to park and are ideal for short trips around town.

× Yes I have arrived when I was 8 and my father bought it for me.

✓ Yes, I got one when I was 8 and my father bought it for me.

The student used 'have arrived' incorrectly; 'arrive' is not used to mean 'obtain' a possession. The intended meaning is acquiring a bike in the past, so the simple past 'got' (or 'received') is appropriate. Also add a comma after 'Yes' for clarity. Suggestion: use 'I got one' or 'I received one' when describing past possession acquisition.

× I usually wrote it to school and and to my grandparents house when I was young everyday and I also often went fishing with my dad and we circle together we cycle.

✓ I usually rode it to school and to my grandparents' house every day when I was young, and I often went fishing with my dad; we cycled together.

Multiple errors: 'wrote' is incorrect verb choice (should be 'rode' for riding a bike). There is a duplicated 'and and'. 'grandparents house' needs a possessive apostrophe. 'everyday' (adjective) should be 'every day' (adverb). 'circle' is wrong; the intended verb is 'cycle' or 'cycled'. Tense consistency: simple past ('rode', 'went', 'cycled') fits past narrative. Punctuation was added to split clauses clearly. Suggestion: use correct verbs for actions (ride/rode, cycle/cycled) and correct forms of 'every day' and possessives.

× Yes, bicycle are very popular in Vietnam for example.

✓ Yes, bicycles are very popular in Vietnam, for example.

Subject-verb number mismatch and singular/plural form: 'bicycle are' mixes singular noun with plural verb. Use plural 'bicycles' with 'are'. Also add a comma before 'for example'. Suggestion: ensure noun number matches verb ('bicycles are').

× Students ride by to school in groups with friends or along and by.

✓ Students ride to school in groups with friends or alone.

The original contains incorrect prepositions/words: 'ride by to school' is incorrect; use 'ride to school'. 'along and by' is nonsensical; likely meant 'alone'. Suggestion: use correct preposition 'to' when indicating destination and use 'alone' for solitary riding.

× Very popular because it's convenient, cheap and easy to park as it's usually used for short chips.

✓ They are very popular because they're convenient, cheap, and easy to park; they are usually used for short trips.

The sentence fragment 'Very popular because...' lacks a clear subject and is informal; start with subject 'They are'. 'it's' ambiguous — use 'they're' referring to bicycles. 'chips' is a wrong word choice; intended word is 'trips'. Maintain plural agreement and use commas in a list. Suggestion: ensure complete sentences with correct subject and correct vocabulary ('trips').