自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and incorrect phrasing (e.g., “on once a week”, “I mean exactly”). Use correct tense and smoother expressions to describe feelings or frequency.

範例: Yes — I had a bike as a child and I rode it at least once a week. Riding was great fun because I enjoyed feeling the breeze and the freedom of being outdoors, which helped me relax after school.

建議: Provide a direct answer then give clear, specific reasons with linking words. Correct grammar (singular/plural, articles) and use clearer vocabulary. Avoid filler words like “umm” and unclear phrases like “it can lead to unused of bicycle.” Focus on two concise reasons (infrastructure, culture or safety) and give a brief example or comparison.

範例: No, I don't think bicycles are very popular in my country. For one thing, there are few dedicated cycle lanes, so riding feels unsafe. Also, many people prefer cars for convenience, so bicycles are used much less than in some European countries where cycling is common and well supported.

× Yes, I used to ride a bike on once a week at least.

✓ Yes, I used to ride a bike at least once a week.

The phrase 'on once a week' is incorrect word order. Use the adverbial phrase 'once a week' after the verb, and 'at least' should come before it for emphasis. This fixes adverb placement and makes the sentence natural.

× It was quite fun still now.

✓ It was quite fun, and it still is now.

The original mixes past 'was' with 'still now' improperly. To express that the fun continues into the present, keep the past clause and add a present-tense clause: 'it still is now.' This corrects tense consistency.

× And also I can feel wind naturally and I mean exactly and I can feel relaxed and also unwind.

✓ I could feel the wind naturally and exactly, and I felt relaxed and able to unwind.

The student is describing past habitual experiences, so use past tense ('could', 'felt') rather than present. Also 'wind' needs the definite article 'the' in this context. 'I mean exactly' is unclear; 'exactly' placed after 'naturally' or removed improves clarity. Combine clauses to be concise.

× Umm no. Bicycles is very less used compared to European countries.

✓ Umm no. Bicycles are used much less compared to European countries.

Subject-verb agreement: 'Bicycles' is plural so use 'are' not 'is'. Also 'very less' is ungrammatical; use 'much less' or 'used less' for comparison. Reorder to 'are used much less' for natural phrasing.

× The other European countries umm because of like a cycling road and umm uncomfortable of riding a bike, it can lead to unused of bicycle.

✓ In other European countries, dedicated cycling roads and greater comfort when riding make bicycles more widely used; the lack of such infrastructure here leads to bicycles being unused.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. Reorganize into a clear cause-effect structure: state the situation in other countries (dedicated cycling roads and comfort) and contrast with the local situation (lack of infrastructure leads to low bicycle use). Use 'bicycles being unused' or 'low bicycle use' instead of 'unused of bicycle.' Replace informal fillers ('umm', 'like') and correct noun forms and prepositions for clarity.