自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Improve clarity, grammar and coherence. Start with a clear topic sentence answering the question, correct factual/word-choice errors, use linking words for coherence, and avoid irrelevant or confusing details. Keep answers concise (max 5 sentences) and give specific details (e.g., where you rode, how often, who with).

範例: Yes. I had a small bicycle when I was about six or seven because my mother bought it for me. I used to ride it every afternoon around my neighborhood near the river, often with my friends. Riding made me feel relaxed and happy because it gave me freedom and a chance to play outside.

建議: Fix vocabulary and grammar, give a clear opinion, and support it with specific, relevant reasons using linking words. Replace unclear phrases (e.g., 'cycling lens', 'Mozart Sky trends') with correct terms like 'bike lanes' and names of transport types. Limit to a clear topic sentence plus one or two supporting details.

範例: I don't think bicycles are very popular in my country. Firstly, there are frequent traffic jams and few dedicated bike lanes, so cycling can be unsafe. Secondly, most people prefer public transport such as buses and the metro for commuting because they are faster and more convenient.

× I had a bike when I was around 6-7 years old, my mom bought me from a prison as I can reach a tub of the class.

✓ I had a bike when I was about 6 or 7 years old; my mom bought it for me from a shop near the school.

The sentence mixes past tense and present modal meaning and contains wrong words ('prison', 'as I can reach a tub of the class') that make the meaning unclear. Use past tense consistently for past events ('bought', 'had') and replace incorrect nouns with appropriate ones ('shop', 'near the school'). Also split into two clauses with proper punctuation to avoid a run-on sentence. Suggestions: use 'about' for approximate ages, choose correct nouns, keep past tense for completed past actions.

× I love to ride it around my neighborhood along the river.

✓ I loved riding it around my neighborhood along the river.

The context is past (when the student was a child), so the verb should be in the past tense. Change present simple 'I love' and infinitive 'to ride' to past continuous or past habitual form 'loved riding' to match the time frame. Suggestion: match tense to the time reference in the sentence.

× It's giving me a relaxed feeling and a nice day.

✓ It made me feel relaxed and gave me a nice day.

Again, the context is past, so present continuous 'It's giving' is incorrect. Use past simple verbs ('made', 'gave') and an appropriate collocation ('feel relaxed'). Also 'a nice day' is better expressed as 'gave me a nice day' or 'made my day pleasant.' Keep tense consistent with the rest of the narrative.

× In my opinion, I don't think by bikes are popular in my country because it has a lot of traffic jams during the day and there is no cycling lens.

✓ In my opinion, I don't think bikes are popular in my country because there are a lot of traffic jams during the day and there are no cycling lanes.

Several errors: 'by bikes' is wrong pronoun/word choice — should be 'bikes'; 'it has a lot' wrongly refers to 'my country' with 'it' but better to use 'there are' for plural noun 'traffic jams'; 'cycling lens' is a spelling/word error, should be 'cycling lanes'. Use 'there are' for existence of plural things. Suggestion: use correct nouns and the existential 'there is/there are' structure.

× People always use the Mozart Sky trends and Metro to commute to work.

✓ People usually use buses, taxis and the metro to commute to work.

'Mozart Sky trends' is meaningless here — likely incorrect proper nouns or mistranslation. Replace with common transport modes such as 'buses' and 'taxis' and use 'the metro' with the definite article. Also 'always' is too strong; 'usually' or 'often' is more natural. Suggestion: choose accurate transport names and an appropriate adverb of frequency.