自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Cải thiện ngữ pháp cơ bản và độ rõ ràng: sử dụng thì quá khứ cho trải nghiệm trong quá khứ, sửa lỗi từ vựng (bike, buy, ride) và cấu trúc câu (frequency + activity). Thêm một câu chủ đề rõ ràng và tối đa 2-3 câu bổ sung đơn giản để mô tả tần suất và mục đích. Ví dụ cụ thể giúp tăng điểm.

範例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I rode it to school almost every day when I was about ten years old. I usually used it to visit friends and run small errands in my neighborhood.

建議: Sắp xếp ý mạch lạc và dùng từ liên kết phù hợp: bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề trả lời trực tiếp, sau đó dùng linking words như "because" hoặc "also" để nối ý. Sửa ngữ pháp (prefer cycling → prefer cycling because; is not only… but also → not only… but also) và cung cấp một ví dụ cụ thể hoặc so sánh để minh họa.

範例: Yes, I think bikes are becoming more popular in my country because many people are worried about air pollution. Not only does cycling help protect the environment, but it also improves people's health. For example, many commuters now cycle to work a few times a week to stay fit and avoid traffic.

× Yes I have a buy when I work twice and I usually try it to my school.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child; I rode it to school twice a week and usually tried to take it with me.

The student used incorrect verbs and tenses. 'Have' should be past 'had' to match 'when you were a child' (Present tense issue and Past tense issue). 'Buy' is the noun 'bike' was intended; likely they meant 'bike' not 'buy' (word choice error). 'Work twice' is incorrect; intended frequency should be 'twice a week' (incorrect preposition/phrase). 'Try it to my school' is ungrammatical: use 'rode it to school' or 'took it to school' and 'try' is wrong verb. Suggestion: Use past simple for habits in the past (had, rode/took), use correct nouns (bike), and correct adverbial frequency expressions (twice a week).

× MMM because of concerns about environmental pollution, people now prefer cycling is not only helps protect the environment but also improves health.

✓ Because of concerns about environmental pollution, people now prefer cycling; it not only helps protect the environment but also improves their health.

The original sentence is a run-on and mixes structures. Starting with 'MMM' is a filler and should be omitted. 'People now prefer cycling is not only...' incorrectly combines two clauses; we need a main clause plus a coordinating clause. Use a semicolon or separate sentences: 'people prefer cycling; it not only helps...'. Also add a possessive 'their health' for clarity. Suggestion: Remove fillers, separate clauses properly, and ensure subject and verbs align (prefer cycling; it helps/improves).