自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be direct and use correct tense and clearer explanation. Start with a topic sentence in past tense, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid uncertain words like “probably” or inconsistent tense. Also keep it concise (no more than 4–5 short sentences).

範例: No, I didn’t have my own bike when I was a child. Instead, I often borrowed my neighbor’s bicycle because my family couldn't afford one. As a result, I learned to ride slowly and carefully before I had my own bike.

建議: Answer directly and give specific reasons with better vocabulary and linking words. Use correct subject–verb agreement and avoid filler words like “umm” and phrases like “I think” at the end. Provide two clear reasons and a brief example or consequence to support your view.

範例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because they are inexpensive and good for short trips. Moreover, cycling improves fitness and reduces air pollution, so many people choose bikes for commuting in busy cities.

× I don't have a bike when I am a child because probably I borrowed the bike to my neighbor.

✓ I didn't have a bike when I was a child because I probably lent my bike to my neighbor.

Tense and verb choice errors: The sentence mixes present tense ('don't have', 'am') with past context ('when I was a child'). Use past simple 'didn't have' and 'was'. Also 'borrowed the bike to my neighbor' is incorrect phrasing; if the speaker gave their bike temporarily to the neighbor, use 'lent my bike to my neighbor'. If they used the neighbor's bike, 'borrowed from my neighbor' would be correct. Ensure tense consistency and correct verb (lend vs borrow).

× Yes, because bikes helps to improve stability and stamina and bikes, umm, helps to lessen the gas I think. I don't know.

✓ Yes, because bikes help to improve stability and stamina, and they also help to reduce gas use, I think.

Subject-verb agreement and pronoun use: 'bikes' is plural so the verb should be 'help' not 'helps'. Repeating 'bikes' is awkward; use the pronoun 'they' instead. 'Lessen the gas' is unclear; use 'reduce gas use' or 'reduce gasoline consumption'. Maintain plural agreement throughout and use clear noun phrases.