自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be concise, use correct tense and a clear topic sentence. Begin with a direct yes/no response in the past tense, then briefly add one or two supporting details (age, who gave it, or a short memory). Avoid repeating the question. Limit to 2–3 sentences and ensure grammatical accuracy.

範例: Yes, I did. I got my first bike when I was seven, and I used to ride it to the park with my friends every weekend.

建議: Start with a clear topic sentence stating your opinion, then support it with two specific reasons using linking words (for example, because/also). Use correct grammar (subject-verb agreement, articles) and more precise vocabulary (e.g., reduce pollution, take up little parking space). Keep to 2–3 sentences and avoid redundancy.

範例: Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country because they are an inexpensive and convenient way to get around. Moreover, they help reduce air pollution and take up very little parking space, which makes them ideal for crowded cities.

× Did you have a bike when you were a child? Yes I do, had a bike when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.

The student used present tense 'do' with a past-time statement and omitted the subject before 'had', causing incorrect tense and sentence structure. Use past simple 'had' to match the past timeframe and include the subject: 'Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.' Also add a comma after 'Yes' for clarity.

× I do believe bikes are popular in my country because it's one of the easiest way to travel from one place to another place.

✓ I do believe bikes are popular in my country because they're one of the easiest ways to travel from one place to another.

There are two issues: 'it's' is singular while referring to 'bikes' (plural) so use 'they're'; 'one of the easiest way' is incorrect—after 'one of the' use a plural noun 'ways'. Also remove the redundant 'place' and adjust plurality for consistency.

× Also it is help us and avoiding the pollution that is air pollution and it requires only minimal place for parking.

✓ They also help us reduce air pollution and require only minimal parking space.

Pronoun 'it' incorrectly refers to plural 'bikes'; use 'they'. 'Is help us' is ungrammatical—use 'help us' (present simple). 'Avoiding the pollution that is air pollution' is wordy and incorrect; better: 'reduce air pollution'. 'Requires only minimal place for parking' mixes singular verb with plural subject and uses awkward noun 'place'; use plural verb 'require' and the noun phrase 'parking space'.

× So I do believe that bikes are popular in our country.

✓ So, I do believe that bikes are popular in our country.

This sentence is almost correct but needs a comma after the introductory 'So' for natural rhythm. No tense change is required; minor punctuation improves clarity.