自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Сократите лишние звуки нерешительности (например, «uh») и исправьте грамматические ошибки времени. Постройте ответ с топик‑предложением, затем добавьте одну‑две уточняющие детали с логической связкой. Например, укажите, какого это был типа велосипед и что вы чувствовали после кражи, используя связки («but», «so», «after that») для плавного перехода.

範例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was a red mountain bike that I got when I was about seven, and I used it to ride to my friends’ houses and the park. However, five years later it was stolen, so I stopped riding regularly after that.

建議: Уберите повторяющиеся заполнители («uh») и сформулируйте мысль чётко: начните с прямого ответа, затем приведите 1–2 конкретных причины с подходящими связками (например, «because», «for example», «so»). Закончите предложение выводом. Также завершайте мысль грамматически (например, «to reduce traffic and pollution»).

範例: Yes, I think bikes are becoming more popular in my city because the local government has been building dedicated bike lanes and organizing cycling events. For example, there are weekly bike trips and new bike‑sharing schemes, so more people are choosing cycling to reduce traffic and pollution.

× Yes, of course I had a bike when I was a child. It was uh, around the 20 years ago, but after five years my bike was stolen and uh, this is was the finish of story of having bike.

✓ Yes, of course I had a bike when I was a child. It was around 20 years ago, but after five years my bike was stolen, and that was the end of my time having a bike.

Ошибка во временах и словоупотреблении: 'around the 20 years ago' некорректно, правильно 'around 20 years ago' без артикля 'the' и без 'the' перед числом; 'this is was the finish of story of having bike' смешение времен и неверная конструкция. Следует использовать простое прошедшее для последовательных действий в прошлом: 'was stolen' и затем 'that was the end of my time having a bike' или 'that was the end of the story of having a bike'. Рекомендация: используйте простое прошедшее для завершённых действий и простые устойчивые выражения ('around 20 years ago', 'the end of the story', 'having a bike').

× I think nowadays, yes, it's uh, going to be popular because our country is uh, particular our city is uh, uh, doing special roads, uh, trips for bikes and uh, maybe it's connecting with to reduce the.

✓ I think nowadays bikes are becoming popular because our country, especially our city, is building special bike lanes and organizing bike trips, and maybe this is connected to efforts to reduce pollution.

Несколько проблем с выбором времени и структурой: 'it's uh, going to be popular' неудачна — лучше сказать 'bikes are becoming popular' для текущей тенденции. 'particular our city is' неверная структура; правильно 'especially our city'. 'doing special roads' неверно; используйте 'building special bike lanes' или 'creating bike paths'. 'maybe it's connecting with to reduce the' незавершённая и грамматически неверная фраза; правильно 'maybe this is connected to efforts to reduce pollution' или 'maybe this helps reduce traffic/pollution'. Рекомендация: употребляйте present continuous или present simple для общих заявлений о настоящих тенденциях, используйте точные глаголы ('build', 'organize') и завершённые предложения.