自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Improve grammatical accuracy and sentence structure. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add 1–2 concise supporting details. Use correct verb tenses (past simple) and reduce filler words (uh, um). Use linking words (for example, so, and) to make the answer coherent. Keep it under five sentences.

範例: Yes, I did. My parents bought me a small bicycle when I was about seven, and I practiced riding it every day with my neighbors. As a result, I could ride to my school by myself and sometimes cycle to the grocery store for my family.

建議: Provide a clear opinion first, then give specific supporting reasons and examples. Use linking words (for example, because, therefore, however) and correct word choice (children, bicycle, commute). Avoid repetition and unclear phrases. Keep responses concise and well-structured.

範例: Yes, bicycles are quite popular in my country. Many parents encourage their children to learn cycling because it is cheap and healthy, so you can see many students riding bicycles to school, especially in smaller towns and suburbs.

× Oh, yes, exactly. I have a, my parents gave me a bike, uh, let me just practice how to using that bike and I could play it and riding with my neighbor, with my neighbors.

✓ Oh, yes, exactly. My parents gave me a bike; I practiced how to use that bike, and I could play and ride with my neighbor or neighbors.

The student mixes tenses and uses incorrect verb forms. 'I have a' is unnecessary and confuses tense with 'my parents gave me' (past). 'Practice how to using' is incorrect: after 'practice' the correct form is 'practice how to use' (infinitive) or 'practice using' (gerund). 'Riding' should be 'ride' to match 'could'. Suggestion: keep past tense throughout for past experiences, use 'practice how to use' or 'practice using', and maintain parallel verb forms. Grammar problems matched: Present tense issue (ID 6) and Verb + -ing form (ID 8) but per instructions only include listed type: Present tense issue.

× And even I got to go to Christ school, uh, along myself using and when I, uh, and I could use that bike and even I could go to the grocery.

✓ I even went to Christ School by myself using it, and I could use that bike to go to the grocery store.

The original mixes awkward phrasing and incorrect verb choices. 'Got to go' is acceptable but 'went' is clearer for a past habit. 'Along myself' is wrong; use 'by myself'. 'Using' should attach to the bike: 'by myself using it' or better 'by myself using the bike'. 'Go to the grocery' should be 'go to the grocery store'. Maintain past tense consistently for past events. Grammar problems matched: Past tense issue (ID 5).

× Is actually when when we were young and parents always gave their child to practice the bike riding and even more when we are younger and it's lots of bicycle out of the school and children could choose using the bicycle riding to the crane school transportation and even.

✓ Actually, when we were young, parents always encouraged their children to practice riding bikes. When we were younger there were lots of bicycles near the schools, and children could choose to ride bicycles to school for transportation.

The sentence is ungrammatical and confusing. Problems include incorrect word order ('Is actually when when'), wrong verb choices ('gave their child to practice' should be 'encouraged their children to practice'), inconsistent tense ('we are younger' should be 'we were younger'), incorrect noun forms ('lots of bicycle' should be 'lots of bicycles'), and awkward phrase 'crane school transportation' which seems incorrect—assumed intended meaning 'to get to school' or 'for school transportation'. Also 'choose using the bicycle riding' should be 'choose to ride bicycles'. Fix by splitting into clearer sentences, using past tense consistently, correct pluralization and verbs, and proper infinitive 'to ride'. Grammar problems matched: Sentence structure errors (ID 26), Incorrect use of pronouns (ID 12), Singular and plural issue (ID 1), and Incorrect use of prepositions (ID 11) but per instructions included main type: Sentence structure errors.