自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and grammatically correct. Start with a direct topic sentence, then add one or two clear supporting details. Correct tense and article use (e.g., “for my 12th birthday”). Avoid filler words like “you know.”

範例: Yes. My parents gave me a bicycle for my 12th birthday, and I used it every day to visit friends and explore my neighborhood. It helped me become more independent and confident.

建議: Answer directly, use correct grammar and clearer vocabulary. Use linking words (for example, 'because' or 'so') and be specific: mention who uses bikes, for what trips, and any supporting reasons. Avoid fillers and pronunciation stumbles; keep to 2–3 sentences.

範例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are cheap and convenient for short trips. For example, many students and commuters cycle to school or work when the destinations are nearby, which saves time and money.

× So my parents sent me a bike that around my, you know, 12 years old birthday.

✓ So my parents sent me a bike around my 12th birthday.

The sentence has awkward wording and incorrect age phrasing. Use 'around my 12th birthday' rather than 'that around my, you know, 12 years old birthday'. Also remove filler 'that' which is unnecessary. Use ordinal form for age when modifying 'birthday' (12th). This keeps past tense consistent with the question about childhood.

× So absolutely, riding a bike it is the convenient way for every citizens.

✓ Absolutely, riding a bike is a convenient way for every citizen.

There is an extra pronoun 'it' causing a subject error and inappropriate article/plural use. Use 'riding a bike is' (present simple for general truth). Use 'a convenient way' (singular) and 'every citizen' (singular after 'every'). Alternatively 'for all citizens' could be used. This corrects subject-verb structure and noun agreement.

× Umm, so if a person want to go somewhere are not so distance, he could ride a bike rather than than, uh, unfold.

✓ If a person wants to go somewhere that is not far, he could ride a bike instead of taking a car.

Multiple problems: 'person want' should be 'person wants' (subject-verb agreement, third person singular). 'are not so distance' is ungrammatical; replace with 'that is not far' to describe short distances. 'rather than than, uh, unfold' is confused and wrong vocabulary; likely intended 'instead of' and a mode of transport such as 'taking a car' or 'walking'. Use 'could' or 'might' for possibility. The corrected sentence keeps conditional structure and clear comparison.