自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Make the answer grammatical, concise and coherent. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and filler sounds (uh, um). Correct verb tenses and pronouns (use past tense for childhood).

範例: Yes, I had a bicycle when I was a child. My father bought it for me and I rode it to school every day. In the afternoons I practised tricks in the playground, which helped me become more confident on two wheels.

建議: Be specific and organise ideas with linking words. Use accurate vocabulary (e.g. “motorbikes,” “commuter bikes,” “sports bikes”) and avoid repetition. Give one clear reason and an example to support your opinion. Keep to 2–3 sentences max.

範例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because many people use them for commuting and leisure. For example, there are basic commuter bikes for daily travel, rugged adventure bikes with long suspension for touring, and lightweight sports bikes used in racing.

× Yeah, I have a bike.

✓ Yes, I had a bike.

The question asks about having a bike when the student was a child (past time). Using present tense 'have' is incorrect; use past tense 'had' to match the time frame.

× Uh, while I'm child, I got my bicycle.

✓ When I was a child, I got my bicycle.

'While I'm child' is ungrammatical and mixes present tense with the past context. Use the time expression 'When I was a child' and past tense 'got' to form a correct past-time clause.

× My dad bought me a bicycle.

✓ My dad bought me a bicycle.

This sentence is already correct: it correctly uses past tense 'bought' to describe a past event. No change needed.

× I used to ride every day while I'm back to school and I have to, I'll, I'll write and I'm right in, uh, in my playground.

✓ I used to ride every day when I went back to school, and I would ride in my playground.

The original mixes tenses and fragments ('while I'm back to school', 'I have to, I'll, I'll write and I'm right') and misuses present progressive. 'Used to' requires a past-time clause: 'when I went back to school'. Replace the confused fragments with a clear past habitual form: 'I would ride in my playground.'

× The bicycle is very good.

✓ The bicycle was very good.

Because the context is past (childhood), the adjective 'good' should be used with past-tense verb 'was' to match time. Change 'is' to 'was'.

× Yes uh, the bikes are very popular in my country.

✓ Yes, bikes are very popular in my country.

Using 'the bikes' suggests specific bikes; the general statement about bikes should use no article: 'Bikes are very popular.' Also remove filler 'uh' and add comma for clarity.

× We have many types of bikes, like a basic basic CC bikes, and we also got very variety of sports bikes, adventure bikes.

✓ We have many types of bikes, like basic 100cc bikes, and we also have a wide variety of sports bikes and adventure bikes.

Several issues: 'a basic basic CC bikes' is ungrammatical—use 'basic 100cc bikes' or similar, matching number. 'we also got very variety' mixes forms; use 'we also have a wide variety' for correct collocation. Use 'and' to connect 'sports bikes and adventure bikes.'

× The adventure bikes are very good.

✓ Adventure bikes are very good.

'The adventure bikes' is acceptable, but for general statement omit 'the' to match previous sentence style: 'Adventure bikes are very good.' This also keeps consistent plural generalization.

× Adventure bikes have many features and sports bikes are used in in racing.

✓ Adventure bikes have many features, and sports bikes are used in racing.

There is a duplicated 'in in' and slightly awkward phrasing. Remove the duplicate and keep 'are used in racing' which correctly uses passive present for general facts. No tense change needed.