自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer does not address the question (bike) and contains incorrect vocabulary (“bag” and “wrote” instead of likely “bike” and “rode”). Focus on directly answering the examiner’s question with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details. Keep it natural and concise (no more than 5 sentences) and correct verb choices and simple past tense. Use linking words if you add reasons or details (for example: “because,” “so,” “also”).

範例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My father gave it to me for my tenth birthday, and I rode it to school and to my friends’ houses every day. Because I used it so often, it became very important to me and helped me feel independent.

建議: Your answer is relevant but has grammar and clarity issues. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give two concise, specific reasons with correct grammar and linking words. Use singular/plural agreement (government wants), correct expressions (reduce carbon emissions), and clearer phrasing for health benefits and traffic avoidance. Limit to 2–4 sentences and avoid vague phrases like “avoid the opposites.”

範例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country. Firstly, the government promotes cycling to reduce carbon emissions, so many people choose bikes for short trips. Secondly, cycling is good for health and often faster than driving in busy city centres.

× When I was a child, I had a bag that my father gave me as a birthday present. I wrote it every day to get to school and visit my friends, so it was very important to me.

✓ When I was a child, I had a bag that my father gave me as a birthday present. I rode it every day to get to school and visit my friends, so it was very important to me.

The student used 'wrote' incorrectly; context requires the verb 'ride' (past 'rode') for using a bike. This is a sentence structure/word choice error. Suggestion: choose verbs that match the action (ride/rode for bicycles).

× Absolutely yes, because nowadays the government want to reduce the carbon emission, so the bike is is a good thing for everyone.

✓ Absolutely yes, because nowadays the government wants to reduce carbon emissions, so the bike is a good thing for everyone.

Errors: 'government want' disagrees with singular subject government — use 'wants' (third person singular). 'carbon emission' should be plural or uncountable 'carbon emissions'. There is a duplicated 'is'. Also article and count usage: 'the bike' is acceptable but 'bikes are' might be more natural. Suggestion: ensure subject-verb agreement and correct noun number; remove duplicated words.

× The second why? Because if the people take the bikes, they can good for their healthy, they can avoid the opposites.

✓ Second, if people ride bikes, it can be good for their health and they can avoid pollution/traffic congestion.

Multiple issues under incorrect pronoun and word choice: 'the people' is unnecessary — use 'people'. 'take the bikes' is unnatural — use 'ride bikes'. 'they can good for their healthy' lacks a verb and uses wrong adjective/noun forms; correct is 'it can be good for their health' or 'they can improve their health'. 'avoid the opposites' is unclear; likely intended 'avoid pollution' or 'avoid traffic'. Suggestion: use clear pronouns, appropriate verbs, and correct noun forms (health, pollution) and concise phrasing.