自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence answering the question (Yes/No/I’m not sure), then give one or two specific supporting details and avoid unnecessary hypothetical phrasing. Use linking words (however, because) if you add contrast or reason. Keep it to no more than 3–4 short sentences.

範例: I’m not sure if I had a bike when I was a child. I don’t remember owning one, because my family usually walked or took public transport. However, I do remember occasionally riding other children’s bikes in the neighborhood.

建議: Give a clear opinion then support it with specific reasons or examples. Avoid repeating words and use linking words (for example, because, therefore). Vary vocabulary (e.g., motorcycles, bicycles, two-wheelers, common mode of transport). Limit to 3–4 concise sentences.

範例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are affordable and easy to park. For example, many commuters use motorcycles or bicycles for short trips in the city, and you can see them on almost every street during rush hour.

× I really don't remember about it, but if I ever had a bike I would never throw that, so I don't think so.

✓ I really don't remember it, but if I ever had a bike I would never throw it away, so I don't think I did.

The phrase 'remember about it' is incorrect; 'remember it' or 'remember having it' is correct (preposition error). 'Throw that' is unnatural; use the phrasal verb 'throw it away' for getting rid of something. Also the sentence mixes conditional and past facts: 'if I ever had a bike' plus 'so I don't think so' is unclear. Changing the final clause to 'so I don't think I did' clarifies that the speaker believes they did not have a bike. Suggestion: use 'remember it' or 'remember having one', use 'throw it away' for discarding, and keep tense/meaning consistent. Example improved alternatives: 'I really don't remember having one, but if I ever had a bike I would never have thrown it away, so I don't think I did.'

× Definitely because in my country people mostly travel through bikes, so the vehicle mostly used in my country is bikes and bicycles.

✓ Definitely, because in my country people mostly travel by bike, so the vehicles most used in my country are bicycles.

Several issues: 'travel through bikes' uses incorrect preposition and construction (should be 'travel by bike' or 'travel by bicycle'). 'the vehicle mostly used in my country is bikes and bicycles' has subject-verb agreement and redundancy problems: singular 'vehicle' with plural 'bikes', and repeating 'bikes and bicycles'. Correct to plural 'vehicles' and 'are bicycles' for agreement. Also 'mostly used' is better as 'most used' or 'most commonly used'. Suggestion: use 'travel by bike', choose singular/plural consistently, and avoid redundancy. Example improved alternative: 'Definitely. In my country people mostly travel by bike, so bicycles are among the most commonly used vehicles.'

× So yes, bikes are very commonly popular in my country.

✓ So yes, bikes are very popular in my country.

The phrase 'very commonly popular' is redundant and uses adverbs awkwardly. 'Commonly' and 'popular' overlap; 'very popular' is natural and concise. Alternatively, 'very commonly used' would be correct if focusing on usage rather than popularity. Suggestion: choose either 'popular' or 'commonly used' depending on intended meaning; do not stack similar modifiers.