自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and natural: state directly that you had a bike, give the exact age, and add one brief supporting detail (where you rode it or who taught you). Avoid awkward phrasing like "around it." Use linking words only if adding extra detail.

範例: Yes, I did. My father bought me a bike when I was eight, and I used to ride it around our neighborhood every afternoon. My older brother taught me, so I learned very quickly.

建議: Improve grammar and clarity: use plural/singular correctly, avoid filler sounds, and give specific examples of where and how people use bikes. Use a linking phrase to connect your main idea and supporting details.

範例: Yes, I think bicycles are very popular, especially among young people, because they are cheap and environmentally friendly. For example, in many cities people use bikes to commute to work or university and to run short errands around town.

× Yes, my father bought me a bike when I was 8 years old around it.

✓ Yes, my father bought me a bike when I was about 8 years old.

The phrase 'around it' is incorrect here; the correct expression to estimate age is 'about 8 years old' or 'around 8.' Also word order: 'about 8 years old' follows the verb phrase. Replace 'around it' with 'about 8 years old' to be grammatically correct and natural.

× Yes, I believe it's very popular, especially for young people and additionally because it's very environmentally friendly.

✓ Yes, I believe they are very popular, especially with young people, and additionally because they are very environmentally friendly.

The student uses singular 'it' to refer to 'bikes,' which is plural. This causes a subject-pronoun and verb agreement error. Use plural pronoun 'they' and plural verb 'are.' Also use the preposition 'with young people' for natural collocation.

× So, uh, in many cities, uh, people write bikes for works, uh, for travel like, or for any other purpose.

✓ So, in many cities, people ride bikes to work, to travel, or for other purposes.

The verb 'write' is incorrect; the correct verb for using a bicycle is 'ride.' 'For works' is ungrammatical; use 'to work' (infinitive) or 'for work' depending on context. 'For travel like' is awkward; use 'to travel' or 'for travel,' and 'any other purpose' should be pluralized to 'other purposes' for natural phrasing. The corrected sentence uses appropriate verbs and prepositions and matches the plural subject 'people.'