自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be concise, keep tense consistent, and avoid redundancy. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one brief supporting detail. Use past tense throughout when talking about childhood and avoid repeating time phrases. Replace vague phrasing with a specific example.

範例: No, I didn't own a bike as a child. Instead, I often borrowed bikes from my older sister or friends to ride around the neighborhood on weekends.

建議: Give a clear topic sentence, then logically order 2–3 specific reasons using linking words. Avoid fillers and minor errors (e.g., 'baby' -> 'third'). Use countable/plural forms correctly (bikes, reasons) and prefer varied vocabulary (popular, widespread). Keep it to 2–3 sentences total.

範例: Yes, bikes are very popular in the Philippines. Firstly, cycling is a common social activity among friends and families; secondly, it is environmentally friendly; and thirdly, it is inexpensive compared with many other sports.

× I didn't have a bike when I was a child, but I have bikes that I borrow from my friends and my sisters when I was young.

✓ I didn't have a bike when I was a child, but I borrowed bikes from my friends and my sisters when I was young.

The sentence mixes past and present tense incorrectly. The main clause is past (didn't have, when I was a child), so the actions of borrowing should also be in the past. Use the simple past 'borrowed' instead of present 'borrow' and 'have bikes' is inconsistent with 'didn't have'; replace with 'borrowed bikes' to show past repeated actions. Suggestion: maintain consistent past tense for events that occurred in childhood.

× Oh absolutely. I do think that bike is something that is very common in the Philippines.

✓ Oh absolutely. I do think that bikes are something that are very common in the Philippines.

The original uses the singular noun 'bike' with a context implying generality; general statements require plural ('bikes') or a singular with an article ('a bike is'). Also the verb 'is' must agree with the chosen subject: 'bikes are' for plural. Suggestion: use plural 'bikes are' for general popularity.

× First because it is a common activity within friends and 2nd is it is very environmentally friendly and 3rd baby because it is cheap.

✓ First, it is a common activity among friends; second, it is very environmentally friendly; third, it is cheap.

The original sentence has incorrect connectors and an extraneous word 'baby'. Beginning points with 'First because' is ungrammatical—use 'First, ...'. 'Within friends' is awkward; use 'among friends'. Numbering should use 'second' and 'third' followed by commas or semicolons. Remove 'baby'. Suggestion: use clear ordinal connectors and parallel structure for listed reasons.

× It is a cheap activity if you compare it with other sports.

✓ It is a cheap activity compared with other sports.

The phrase 'compare it with other sports' is grammatically acceptable but wordier; a more natural and concise form is 'compared with other sports'. Also 'compare it with' requires an agent (you) if kept: 'if you compare it with other sports'. Suggestion: use passive or reduced clause 'compared with' for clarity and brevity.