自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: ควรแก้ไวยากรณ์และทำให้คำตอบเป็นธรรมชาติมากขึ้น รวมถึงเพิ่มรายละเอียดเล็กๆ น้อยๆ เพื่อขยายคำตอบ เช่น ระยะเวลา ใช้งานอย่างไร และความทรงจำที่เกี่ยวข้อง ใช้ประโยคหัวข้อแล้วสนับสนุนด้วยข้อมูลเพิ่มเติมอย่างสั้นและเชื่อมโยงกัน

範例: Yes, I did. I had a small bicycle that I called Nodang. I rode it around my neighborhood every afternoon for about three years, and it was my favorite way to meet friends and explore nearby streets.

建議: ปรับโครงสร้างประโยคและไวยากรณ์ให้ชัดเจน ใช้ linking words เพื่ออธิบายเหตุผลอย่างเป็นระบบ ระบุปัจจัยอื่นๆ นอกเหนือจากสภาพอากาศ เช่นการจราจรหรือโครงสร้างพื้นฐาน และให้ตัวอย่างหรือเปรียบเทียบสั้นๆ

範例: I don't think bicycles are very popular in my country. Mainly, the hot and humid weather, especially in Bangkok, makes cycling uncomfortable, and heavy traffic and limited bike lanes also discourage people from riding. As a result, most people prefer motorcycles or cars for daily travel.

× Yes I have. I have a small one and her name is Nodang.

✓ Yes, I did. I had a small one and its name was Nodang.

The student used present tense 'have' though the question asked about the past ('when you were a child'), so past tense is required (Grammar Problem Type 5). Also, the pronoun 'her' is incorrect for a bicycle; use the neutral possessive pronoun 'its' (Grammar Problem Type 12). Additionally, 'a small one' refers to a bike so the past form 'had' fits. Suggested improvement: Match verb tense to the time frame (use past tense for past situations) and use appropriate pronouns for things (its).

× In my opinion is not because of the weather, especially in Bangkok, it's really hot in the afternoon so we can buy in on a bicycle.

✓ In my opinion, it is not because of the weather. Especially in Bangkok, it's really hot in the afternoon, so people do not usually ride bicycles.

Multiple errors: Missing subject 'it' after 'In my opinion' and incorrect verb form (need 'it is' for a present general statement) (Grammar Problem Type 6). The phrase 'we can buy in on a bicycle' is ungrammatical and likely intended to mean 'we do not ride bicycles' or 'we cannot ride bicycles' because of heat; use a clear present-tense statement such as 'people do not usually ride bicycles.' Also 'we' is less clear than 'people' when making a general statement. Suggested improvement: Include the subject 'it' for 'it is', use correct present-tense verbs for general truths, and choose clear subjects ('people' or 'we') consistent with meaning.