自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 문장이 자연스럽지 않고 문법적 오류와 중복 표현이 있습니다. 정확한 시제와 소유 표현을 사용하고, 주제문과 부연 설명을 명확히 구분하세요. 예를 들어 ‘I didn’t have a bike’ 또는 ‘My parents bought one for me’처럼 말하고, 그 다음 문장에서 ‘I wasn’t good at riding’의 이유나 결과를 한두 문장으로 덧붙이세요. 접속사(or linking words)나 명확한 연결어를 사용하여 문장 흐름을 개선하세요.

範例: I didn't have my own bike when I was a child; my parents bought one for me. However, I wasn't very good at riding it, so I mostly walked or took the bus to school.

建議: 답변이 중복되고 불분명하며 문법과 연결어 사용이 부족합니다. 먼저 직접적인 주제문으로 의견을 제시한 뒤, 이유와 구체적 예시를 한두 문장으로 연결하세요. 예: ‘Not very popular’이라 말한 뒤에 대중교통 사용 빈도, 도로 여건, 혹은 자전거 이용자 유형 등을 구체적으로 설명하세요. 불필요한 반복을 피하고 단어 수를 적절히 유지하세요.

範例: I don't think bikes are very popular in my country because many people prefer buses and cars for commuting. Also, the roads and cycling infrastructure are limited, so only some people cycle for leisure or short trips.

× No, I didn't buy bike myself.

✓ No, I didn't have a bike myself.

The student used 'didn't buy' which indicates an action of purchasing; the question asks possession in childhood, so past simple of 'have' is appropriate. Also 'bike' needs an article 'a'. Suggestion: use 'I didn't have a bike' to express past possession.

× My parents bought for me and then I wasn't good at riding a bike.

✓ My parents bought one for me, but I wasn't good at riding it.

The original sentence omits the object after 'bought' and repeats ideas awkwardly. 'Bought one for me' clearly states what they bought; 'it' refers back to the bike. Use 'but' rather than 'and then' to contrast. Also 'riding a bike' can be made specific as 'riding it'. Suggestion: include the object and a pronoun to avoid repetition.

× I think it's not popular because everyone, a lot of people use transportation to go work or to go school like that.

✓ I don't think they're very popular because many people use public transport to go to work or to school.

The phrase 'everyone, a lot of people' is redundant and ungrammatical; choose one quantifier. 'It's not popular' mismatches plural 'bikes' so use 'they' or 'bikes'. 'Transportation' is count/mass issue; 'public transport' is more natural. Use 'go to work' / 'go to school'. Suggestion: use a single appropriate quantifier such as 'many people' and correct verb/pronoun agreement.

× And then and then I think, umm, the people likes the people likes riding a bike.

✓ I think people like riding bikes.

The verb 'likes' does not agree with the plural subject 'people'; use 'like'. Also the phrase repeats 'the people' twice and is redundant. Use plural 'bikes' or 'a bike' appropriately. Suggestion: simplify to 'people like riding bikes' for correct subject-verb agreement and clarity.