自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Старайтесь давать более компактные и грамматически точные ответы, избегая лишних слов и повтора. Начните с чётного тематического предложения, затем добавьте 1–2 конкретные детали (например, модель велосипеда, где и с кем катались) и завершите коротким итоговым замечанием. Обратите внимание на согласование времен (например, «it was a 26‑inch»), устраните повтор «it was» и используйте связки (for example, with, so) для плавности.

範例: Yes. I had a bike when I was about nine or ten — a Jaguar 26‑inch. I rode it often at my grandmother’s house with my friends, and we would race each other for fun.

建議: Сформулируйте основную мысль одним предложением, затем поддержите её 1–2 конкретными причинами или примерами. Избегайте ненужного повторения одной и той же идеи («right now», «earn money»). Проверьте выбор слов и формы: «deliverer» лучше заменить на «delivery rider» или «courier», и используйте точные выражения времени (e.g. "since 2020" или "around 2023"). Добавьте связки (because, therefore, for example) для логичности.

範例: Yes — bikes are very popular now because many people work as delivery riders. For example, since around 2023 many couriers use bicycles as an affordable way to travel and earn money for their families.

× I used to have a bike called Jaguar.

✓ I used to have a bike called Jaguar.

No correction needed. Sentence is grammatically correct; 'used to' correctly indicates a past habitual action. Explanation: 'used to' is followed by the base form of the verb and is appropriate for describing a past habit.

× It was a really nice back 26 size.

✓ It was a really nice 26-inch back wheel.

The original phrase uses word order and nouns incorrectly to describe a bicycle wheel size. Suggestion: use '26-inch' as a compound adjective before the noun and specify 'back wheel' or 'rear wheel' for clarity. In English, measurements like 26 inches are expressed as '26-inch' when used as adjectives.

× It was and I used to ride it a lot when I was in my grandmother's house and it was really interesting to be together with my friends and we always played races together.

✓ I used to ride it a lot when I stayed at my grandmother's house. It was really enjoyable to be with my friends, and we always raced each other.

The original sentence is run-on and repetitive, with awkward phrasing 'It was and I used to' and 'played races together.' Suggestions: split into two sentences for clarity, use 'stayed at my grandmother's house' rather than 'was in,' use 'enjoyable' instead of 'interesting' for social context, and use 'raced each other' or 'had races' instead of 'played races together.'

× Especially nowadays, right now, a lot of people are working as a deliverer using these bikes.

✓ Especially nowadays, a lot of people work as delivery riders using these bikes.

Problems: redundancy 'nowadays, right now' and incorrect noun 'deliverer' for the job; 'are working as' is acceptable but 'work as' is more natural for habitual present. Suggestion: use 'delivery riders' or 'delivery workers' and avoid repetitive time expressions.

× They are earning some money for themselves and therefore their families.

✓ They earn money for themselves and for their families.

Use of 'are earning' is present continuous but general statement fits simple present 'earn.' Also 'therefore' is awkward; use 'for' to show beneficiary. Suggestion: prefer simple present for habitual actions and use parallel prepositional phrases 'for themselves and for their families.'

× These bikes became really popular in about 2023 and right now people are using them as a way of transport to earn some money.

✓ These bikes became really popular around 2023, and now people use them as a means of transport to earn money.

Use 'around' instead of 'in about' for time approximation, replace 'right now' with 'now' to avoid redundancy, and prefer simple present 'use' for a current habitual action. 'Way of transport' is awkward; 'means of transport' or 'a way of transporting themselves' is better. Also 'to earn some money' can be simplified to 'to earn money.'