自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Give a clear, concise response that directly answers the question with a correct topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details. Use correct grammar (past tense), avoid repetition, and keep it under five sentences. Use linking words (for example, because, so) to connect ideas. For example, say when you got the bike, who bought it, what kind it was, and a short memory related to it.

範例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My father bought it for me when I was seven, and it was a small red bicycle with training wheels. Because I loved riding it, I spent every afternoon practicing in our street until I could ride without help.

建議: Start with a direct opinion sentence, then give two specific reasons or examples to support it. Use linking words (for example, because, so, therefore) and correct word choice (popular, convenient, common) and avoid unclear phrases. Keep answers coherent and under five sentences.

範例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. This is because many cities have dedicated bike lanes, so cycling is safe and convenient. For example, people often use bikes for commuting to work and for short errands instead of driving.

× I had a bike when I was child and my father bought me for excess.

✓ I had a bike when I was a child and my father bought it for me.

Singular/plural and noun reference: 'child' needs the article 'a' to be grammatically correct with 'was'. 'bought me for excess' is ungrammatical: the intended meaning is that the father bought the bike for the speaker, so the correct object pronoun is 'it' (referring to the bike) and the indirect object is 'me' or the phrase 'bought it for me'. Replace 'for excess' (incorrect phrase) with 'for me'. Suggestion: use 'a child' and 'bought it for me'.

× Then I was.

✓ Then I cried.

Sentence is incomplete and lacks a verb or clear meaning. 'Then I was' is a fragment. Based on context, the student likely intended to add an action (for example 'Then I was happy' or 'Then I cried'). Choose an appropriate verb to complete the sentence. Suggestion: always include a verb and an object or complement to form a complete clause.

× I used to write, I used to write.

✓ I used to ride it.

Wrong verb choice and repetition: 'used to' should be followed by the base verb to describe habitual past actions. 'Write' is likely a wrong verb here; context about a bike requires 'ride'. Also avoid unnecessary repetition. Suggestion: use 'I used to ride it' to indicate habitual past action.

× Yes, the bikes are beautiful in my country and most of the people are too like to bike because it's very simple for Germany and and.

✓ Yes, bikes are popular in my country, and most people also like to ride bikes because it's very convenient and cheap.

Multiple article and word-choice issues: 'the bikes' is unnecessary; use general plural 'bikes' when speaking about bikes in general. 'most of the people' should be 'most people'. 'are too like to bike' is incorrect word order and verb choice — use 'also like to ride bikes'. 'it's very simple for Germany and and' is unclear; likely intended 'it's very convenient and cheap' or similar reason; remove 'for Germany' which doesn't fit context. Suggestion: use general plural nouns without 'the' for general statements, use correct verb collocation 'like to ride', and provide clear reasons such as 'convenient' or 'cheap'.

× it's very simple for Germany and and.

✓ it's very convenient and cheap.

Preposition and phrase error: 'for Germany' is an incorrect or irrelevant prepositional phrase here; if the speaker meant 'in Germany' they should say 'in Germany', but context seems to describe why people like biking, so a description of convenience fits. Also 'and and' is a repetition error. Suggestion: use appropriate adjectives ('convenient', 'cheap') and correct prepositions when referring to locations ('in Germany').