自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be clear, concise and accurate. Start with a direct topic sentence, then add 1–2 specific supporting details using correct vocabulary and linking words. Avoid unclear words and grammar errors (e.g., tense, word choice). Aim for 2–4 sentences total. For example, say when you had the bike, how often you used it, and one specific memory that shows its benefit.

範例: Yes. I had a bike from about age seven and I rode it almost every day to school and to visit friends. Riding taught me independence and confidence; for example, I used to race with neighborhood children, which improved my balance and made me more outgoing.

建議: Give a clear, direct opinion first, then support it with precise examples and linking words. Correct grammar (subject-verb agreement) and choose appropriate vocabulary (e.g., "very popular", "ride bikes to take children to school", "morning markets"). Avoid fillers and unclear phrases. Keep to 2–3 concise sentences.

範例: Yes, bikes are very popular in Thailand. Many people use bicycles to take children to school and to travel short distances to places like morning markets. Because they are cheap and convenient, bicycles remain a common choice in many towns.

× I had a bike and I was a child, and I use it almost every day to go to school and visit friends.

✓ I had a bike when I was a child, and I used it almost every day to go to school and visit friends.

The sentence mixes past and present tense. The context describes childhood (past), so verbs should be in the past tense. Change 'use' to 'used' to match 'had' and 'was'. Also add 'when' for natural phrasing. Suggestion: Keep all actions that happened in the past consistent by using past tense verbs (used, went, visited).

× Writing taught me independence and confidence.

✓ Riding taught me independence and confidence.

This appears to be a word choice/typo: 'Writing' does not fit the context about bikes; 'Riding' is the intended verb. The sentence structure is otherwise fine. Suggestion: Check for similar typos and choose verbs that match the topic (ride/riding for bikes).

× For example, I remember racing with neighborhood kids on vegans, which improved my balance and often ordination.

✓ For example, I remember racing with neighborhood kids on weekends, which improved my balance and coordination.

Several word choice errors: 'on vegans' is likely a mistaken phrase for 'on weekends' (preposition + noun), and 'ordination' is incorrect; the intended noun is 'coordination'. Also 'often' is misplaced; if you mean it happened frequently, rephrase: 'which often improved my balance and coordination' or simply 'which improved my balance and coordination.' Suggestion: Choose correct nouns and adverbs; place adverbs near the verb they modify. Proofread for mis-typed words that change meaning.

× Yes, I think by its very popular in Thailand.

✓ Yes, I think bicycles are very popular in Thailand.

The phrase 'by its very popular' is incorrect grammar and pronoun use. 'Its' doesn't refer clearly and 'by' is unnecessary. The subject should be 'bicycles' (or 'they') and the verb 'are' for present simple plural. Suggestion: Use a clear subject and correct verb form: 'I think they are very popular' or name the noun 'bicycles are very popular.'

× This one I see a lot of people ride bikes to send children to school and go through the nightmare gate or morning market.

✓ I often see a lot of people riding bikes to take children to school and to go to the night market or morning market.

Multiple structure issues: 'This one' is unclear; better to start 'I often see'. Use 'riding' (gerund) after 'see' in this context, or 'I see people ride' is possible but 'riding' is natural. 'Send children to school' is awkward; 'take children to school' is natural. 'Nightmare gate' seems to be a wrong phrase; likely 'night market.' Also coordinate parallel verbs: 'to take... and to go to...'. Suggestion: Keep subject clear, use gerunds after perception verbs when appropriate, and ensure nouns are correct ('night market').

× So this is uh the resort that can confirm the flight is popular in Thailand.

✓ So this is evidence that cycling is popular in Thailand.

This sentence uses incorrect nouns and metaphors: 'resort' and 'confirm the flight' do not match the intended meaning. 'Evidence' or 'an indication' fits the context. Use 'cycling' or 'bicycling' as the subject and say 'is popular in Thailand.' Suggestion: Choose vocabulary that matches meaning and avoid literal translations; use 'evidence/indication' instead of 'resort' and 'cycling' instead of 'the flight.'