自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is relevant and understandable but could be improved by removing fillers (uh), giving a clear topic sentence and adding one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Keep it within 3–4 concise sentences.

範例: Yes, I did. I often borrowed my sister's bicycle to ride to school and to the park. For example, I would cycle five kilometers each morning, which helped me stay fit and saved my family bus money.

建議: Your answer addresses the question but is disorganized, contains fillers and an unfinished ending. Improve by starting with a clear topic sentence, using linking words to structure reasons and an example, and finish with a complete concluding sentence. Be specific about what infrastructure is lacking and why you want bikes to be more popular.

範例: Not really. There is little safe cycling infrastructure such as bike lanes and secure parking, so most people prefer cars or motorbikes. For instance, without dedicated lanes cyclists risk traffic accidents, which discourages cycling. I would like bikes to be more popular because they reduce congestion and pollution.

× Uh, in fact, I've used my sister's bicycle, uh, to go to school, to go to the park, et cetera.

✓ In fact, I've used my sister's bicycle to go to school and to the park.

The original sentence uses 'used' (past participle) correctly in present perfect 'I've used', but the sentence has unnecessary pauses and an awkward list with 'et cetera.' Cleaned version removes filler words and replaces 'et cetera' with a clear conjunction. Suggestion: avoid fillers and use 'and' to join two clear items; 'I've used' correctly indicates past experience continuing to present.

× Hmm not really uh, because there is no infrastructure for the bikes.

✓ Hmm, not really, because there is no infrastructure for bikes.

'The bikes' implies specific bikes; general statements about a category usually take no article: 'infrastructure for bikes.' Also missing commas around interjection. Suggestion: omit 'the' when speaking generally and punctuate pauses with commas.

× You know, people can just cycle here and around the areas.

✓ You know, people can only cycle here and in the surrounding areas.

Original 'here and around the areas' is awkward and ungrammatical. Use 'in the surrounding areas' for clear reference. Also 'can just' is colloquial; 'can only' or 'can' may suit context. Suggestion: use 'surrounding areas' and a single modal expression for clarity.

× So yeah, cars and you know, 2 Wheeler motorcycles are more popular than bikes or bicycles.

✓ So yeah, cars and two-wheeler motorcycles are more popular than bicycles.

'2 Wheeler' is informal and should be hyphenated and written as words: 'two-wheeler.' 'Bikes or bicycles' is repetitive; use one term. Removed filler 'you know.' Suggestion: use consistent noun forms and avoid fillers.

× In fact, I want it to be more popular in my country because.

✓ In fact, I want bicycles to be more popular in my country.

The original sentence ends with 'because' and lacks a clause explaining reason, resulting in a sentence fragment. Also 'it' is vague; replace with 'bicycles' for clarity. Suggestion: complete the thought by adding a reason after 'because' or drop 'because' to form a complete sentence.