自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Clarify tense and be more concise. Start with a direct topic sentence about childhood, then add a brief, clearly linked follow-up about your current situation. Use past tense for childhood and avoid repetition. Add one specific detail to enrich the answer.

範例: I didn’t have a bike when I was a child because my parents thought it was too dangerous. However, three years ago I bought a pink bike, and now I often cycle around the city with my boyfriend on weekends to get exercise and explore new neighborhoods.

建議: Give a concise opinion statement, then support it with a specific reason and an example. Use present simple consistently and replace vague phrases like “working in the street” with clearer context. Add a linking word to connect opinion and example.

範例: Yes, I do. Cycling is very popular in my country because it’s an affordable way to commute and stay healthy. For example, I often see many people commuting by bike during rush hour, especially students and office workers using bike lanes.

× No, I don't because my parents thought it was dangerous for children to ride a bike.

✓ No, I didn't because my parents thought it was dangerous for children to ride a bike.

The student is answering a past-time question ('Did you have a bike when you were a child?') so they should use past tense. 'I don't' is present tense; 'I didn't' is the correct past tense negative form. Suggestion: match the verb tense to the time reference in the question by using past simple for actions or states in the past.

× But three years ago I bought a pink bike and I often ride a bike with my boyfriend around the city.

✓ But three years ago I bought a pink bike and I often ride it with my boyfriend around the city.

The sentence begins with a past-time marker ('three years ago') so 'I bought' is correct in past simple, but the second clause uses 'I often ride a bike', which is awkward because of repetition and because 'three years ago' implies the action started in the past and continues to the present; present simple 'I often ride' can be acceptable if describing habitual present action. However, to improve cohesion and avoid repetition, replace the noun with the pronoun 'it' ('ride it'). Also ensure tense consistency: keeping 'I often ride it' is fine to indicate a current habitual action begun after the purchase. Suggestion: use pronouns to avoid repetition and ensure the tense matches whether you mean a past one-time action or a present habit.

× Yes, of course. I think bikes are very popular in my country because cycling is a very good exercise for everyone and when I am working in the street I can see a lot of cyclists riding and exercising.

✓ Yes, of course. I think bikes are very popular in my country because cycling is a very good exercise for everyone, and when I am working in the street I can see a lot of cyclists riding and exercising.

The original sentence is mostly correct but needs a comma before the coordinating conjunction 'and' to separate the clauses for clarity. The phrase 'riding and exercising' correctly uses present participles to describe what cyclists are doing. Suggestion: add commas to separate independent clauses and improve readability; retain present continuous when describing ongoing actions you observe (e.g., 'I can see a lot of cyclists riding and exercising').