自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words (uh), correct small grammar issues, and finish with a short specific detail. Use one or two linking words if adding extra information.

範例: Yes, I did. I started on a four-wheeled children’s bike, but within a few weeks I learned to ride a two-wheeler. After that, I felt much more confident and could ride longer distances around my neighborhood.

建議: Answer directly, correct verb forms and reduce repetition. Provide a specific example and use linking words to connect ideas (for example, 'for example' or 'because').

範例: Yes, I think bikes are very popular in Russia. For example, there is an annual bike marathon in Moscow when the main streets are closed to cars, which attracts thousands of cyclists and shows how common cycling is.

× Yes, I did have a bike when I was a child uh, at first it was a bike for children with four wheels uh, but uh, really quickly I learned how to ride a bike with only two wheels and it was far more.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. At first it was a children's bike with four wheels, but I quickly learned how to ride a bike with only two wheels and it was much better.

The student used 'did have' unnecessarily; simple past 'had' is correct for a past possession. 'It was a bike for children' is awkward; use the possessive noun 'children's bike'. 'Really quickly' is wordy; 'quickly' suffices. 'Far more' is incomplete/incorrect here; 'much better' correctly compares quality. Suggestions: use simple past for past facts (had), prefer concise adverbs, and choose appropriate comparative adjectives ('much better').

× Yes, I seen, I think bike bikes are really popular in Russia.

✓ Yes, I saw. I think bikes are really popular in Russia.

'Seen' is a past participle and requires an auxiliary (have/ had) to be correct; for simple past use 'saw'. The student also repeated 'bike bikes'; use the plural noun 'bikes'. Suggestions: use 'saw' for simple past observation and avoid accidental word repetition; use plural 'bikes' when referring generally.

× We all because we have we even have a marathon bike marathon when the whole main streets of Moscow city are being blocked for this event.

✓ We do, because we even have a bike marathon when the main streets of Moscow are blocked for this event.

The original sentence has disfluent fragments and repetition. 'We all because we have we even have' is ungrammatical. Replace with 'We do, because' to answer affirmatively and connect the reason. 'Bike marathon' was repeated; use one noun phrase 'bike marathon'. 'The whole main streets of Moscow city' is wordy and incorrect word order; use 'the main streets of Moscow'. Use simple present passive 'are blocked' (or present continuous if describing temporary action during the event), not 'are being blocked' which is awkward here. Suggestions: remove repetitions, use clear conjunctions ('because'), simplify noun phrases, and use appropriate passive tense ('are blocked').